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08-07-05, 05:55 AM
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Nt Your Average
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Imagine This
IP: 6A3C A9FB
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2348953
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...t=202709&page=2 this was gonna be a collab but i got tired of waitin sorry guys  but hell here it isHook: imagine this... i'm in the center of a thousand galaxy... stand by me... witness the darkness which surrounds all i see... holding me... choking my throat till i gasp for breath... cracked my head... open my thoughts till i ask for help... V1: imagine this... the same feeling inside your mother's womb... it's utter doom... an unborn corpse trapped in another tomb... a covered room... with no doors and windows or lawns and meadows... no it's zero... but the claustrophobia is haunting me though... most that we know... is that only your mother bore all the pain... more than insane... ideas arent conceived at the core of my brain... mortally lame... my small feet are tied with the umbilical cord.. really absurd... is this the miracle work of our Biblical Lord... physically bored... time pases slowly with nothing to do... one thing that's true... it felt like eternity is dying for you... hiding into... the deepest corner of the uterus for nine months... more than i want... i'm morphing from a fetus to an infant... Hook: imagine this... your mother takes liquor, smokes and drugs... she hopes and shrugs... thnking her addiction didnt broke your lungs... she jokes and laughs... having fun while neglecting her loving son... her lucky charm... died in an accident while he's playing guns... V2: imagine this...the same situation inside your mother's womb... it's utter doom... an unborn corpse trapped in another tomb... before he bloomed... he absorbs food and drugs that broke his innocence.. in a sense... he's taking nourishment as a form of punsihment... the money spent... in drugs and herbs should have been spent for health... he's sent to death... the fetus couldn't walk but it went to hell... gently fell... can't you just tell how his frame has fallen apart... going afar... his swollen heart never pumpin from the start... sunked and scarred...with face disfigured in more ways through fissures... stays with features... of a diabolical creature with a case of seizures... amaze to be sure... to call this fetus as a human being... his throat is bleeding... suffering from the chemical's cruel beating... no more breathing... no longer moving while he died in sleep... i cried and weep... as i witness a life that end in one sweep.. Hook: imagine this... we are all living inside a mother's womb... it's utter doom... the unborn corpses trapped in another tomb... imagine this... we finally went into the world outside... use your sight... see the freedom as you see the light... feel its might... smell victory and listen to the words... but weep when you heard... that it's also hard to live in this world... upping for feedback
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08-07-05, 06:11 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
upping..........
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08-07-05, 06:16 AM
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Evolution
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
i was feelin this man... hook was kool... verse one was pretty dope actually vocab was pretty good the story that you fliped was decent, second hook was ight second verse was dope ye man overall nice peice....
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08-07-05, 06:18 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
thanks...upping for feedbak.......................
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08-07-05, 06:27 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
upping...................
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08-07-05, 06:32 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
upping...........
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08-07-05, 06:51 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
upping..........
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08-07-05, 07:07 AM
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IP: 2029 97B3
Seems Like You've Got A Good Flow Here Man..Your Structure Was Cool Well Structure On RV Don't Count No More..But Your Emotion Was Solid Which Is Good In A Piece Like This It'll Open Up Your Mind To See Alot Of Things That Happend Even The Mother Womb Part I Liked That Part Cause It Opened My Mind And Made Me Think About My Mother And What She Went Through To Have Me..And All The Pain A Caused Her...But Your Rhyme Scheme Very Nice Man Alot Of This Here I Can Feel..The Ending Was Perfect Couldn't Of Think Of A Better Way To Say It...Although You Had Some Errors In Here, Like Sometime The Words Wouldn't Rhyme Well Like Punishment And That Word Before It...But Very Good Piece Man Can't Wait Till You Get It Up On Audio....I'm Looking Forward To Collabing With An Emcee Such As Yourself
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08-07-05, 07:10 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
koo thx fo the feed i seem to be betta at topical shit than text shit ima go into topical as well
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08-07-05, 07:14 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
uppidy..........
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08-07-05, 07:32 AM
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This is my first post!
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IP: 2029 97B3
No Problem Man Always Doing Positive Things
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08-07-05, 07:35 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
thx again^ uppidy up diggity
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08-07-05, 08:13 AM
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Light Weight
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IP: 822A 1F23
Ay yo, i'm feelin this song. Good intense lyrics and a good chorus. But i would of liked to be in the collab. But anyway i like the song, it's a good intense and good emotional song. Props man.
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08-07-05, 08:14 AM
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Nt Your Average
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IP: 6A3C A9FB
^^u can b in im jus waitin lol uppidy
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08-07-05, 08:26 AM
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IP: 582C F4D1
awrite UnF yeh its a nice Song, Hook seems catchy, can't really agree wit the above comment on Emotion, coz you can only tell that if it's on audio coz you can't tell by written words about how emotional you are, thats my opinion anyways but yeh it's a gr8 song. pz.
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