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Check in by: 09-05-05 at 12:36 PM

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Batman has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-02-05 12:38 PM.

Premanition has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-02-05 12:40 PM.

In the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid
Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with
So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO
you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero
Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato
You bats only hang upside down so the slouch is greater
‘White guys neva sounded so good’, ah finally some sense
but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench
shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence
forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench
beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back
changed that damn structure but you still plain wack

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oh shit im gittin into it so u better run
they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done
your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock*
maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock**
everything u be writtin is a big fuckin bore
i wouldnt treat u this way if u wasnt my whore
yo why did u have to come and battle me
maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie

explanations:*john cena is a wrestler who wears a chain that has a lock on it
**in his profile it says he is from the UK

nice verse mayne.....uppin for votez.....holla at shya boy

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Voted For: Premanition

v/premanition...your structure was okay but your punches were weak.. u need to elevate on your punchlines and you gott make your verses alot more personal...

batman...you need to have your structured fixed and keep the lines the same..your personals didnt really make sense..its good that you explained but u gott elevate on it...

...you got eminem on your signatures..hes great , dont make him look bad by throwing weak punches...

Voted For: Premanition

hahaha man i gotta give this shit to PREM MAN jusy way more personals

its self explanitoy but i have too explain here it is


PREM: his structure didnt drag
"In the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid
Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with"
^^ nice opener str8 personal
So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO
you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero
Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato
^^nothin spectacular but still was a direct hit wit personal.
"but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench
shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence
forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench
beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back
changed that damn structure but you still plain wack"
^^^ loved the endin man WERD nice flow to it with structure and vocab with persoanls man!!!!!hit em hard with a haymaker conclusion!!!

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BATMAN:
"oh shit im gittin into it so u better run
they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done"
^^this opener was i kinda weak man WERD and fix that structure man...no hate though like ur creativity.

"your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock*
maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock**
^^this was one out of two of ur good punches and personals man...liked ur creativity again man but again work on that structure...

"yo why did u have to come and battle me
maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie"
^^^liked this finisher man nice wordplay and personal punch......

but overall

punches,personal: PREM
creativity: BATMAN

V/PREM!!!

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Voted For: Premanition

Aye u got my vote nic eshit...good punches...sorta.. but they wernt fluent, and didnt flow that well into each other...look a nigga up 4 a battle

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my flows is picture perfect so no need for "cheezes"/

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Voted For: Premanition

oh shit im gittin into it so u better run
they'll be feedin u threw a tube wen im done
^^^No Weak opener
your as gay as john cena wearin that chain wit the lock*
maybe tha UK wouldnt be so embarassed if u wouldnt suck so much cock**
^^^No Wack.....
everything u be writtin is a big fuckin bore
i wouldnt treat u this way if u wasnt my whore
^^^No WEak...
yo why did u have to come and battle me
maybe cuz u a vet who cant beat anyone but a newbie
^^^WAck CLoser

n the shadow of the spider……...since that first kiss kid
Bats are blind, so you deciding which punch to miss with
^^^Ight opener
So you super? A hero? With a record pro-found ZERO
you speechless cos Im burnin ya sound like program nero
^^^Good
Lazy bitch, you a metaphoric vegetable ~ a couch potato
You bats only hang upside down so the slouch is greater
^^^Nice
‘White guys neva sounded so good’, ah finally some sense
but in the team of white cats you don’t even make the bench
^^^LOL....Funny punch
shadowed like torch in tents, less head than tails on pence
forget key to your success beta acquire a spanner & wrench
^^^Ight
beat me with your eyes closed, no you on ya back
changed that damn structure but you still plain wack
^^^Decent closer
V/Prem....this was a onesided battle prem came wit better punchs structure personals an vocab.....Batman u came weak elevate....u need to work on everythin punchs an personals.....No hate.....V/prem
RTF OR THIS VOTE WILL BE REMOVE.......1
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