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12-09-03, 04:33 PM
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New Light
IP: 9EE8 71C9
Yo, I'm new to the game
'Magnificent T' is my name I ain't no hater & Iain't no lover So I'ma keep doin' my thang, If u hatin' on me you hatin' a King. I'm neutral like water but can react like acid , I'm fantastic, calm down pleaze before i become all drastic I spit Lyrics like i spit on the pave the only time u see me is when i contemplate in a cave. If I loose focus i'll be sleepin' in a grave, if u become a hater on me i'll be forced to make u my slave. When i'm flared up i spit out flames, right now i'm candle lit tryin' to bring New Light to the game.  |
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12-09-03, 04:38 PM
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IP: 911F 0299
reply to three other open mics and post links to your replies or this gets deleted.
thanks
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12-09-03, 05:04 PM
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IP: DF7B C8F7
this was way too simple, kids play......lengthen ya bars to start with...that'll help next get a decent scheme going,...and get some multis thrown in....you dont need to go over board on complexity, but some is good..lol......pZ....elevate
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12-09-03, 05:07 PM
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IP: 58E6 C588
new but it was aight heard betta
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12-09-03, 05:28 PM
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IP: 9EE8 71C9
yo, Deva thanx for the advice!
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12-09-03, 05:44 PM
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IP: 9EE8 71C9
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12-09-03, 05:45 PM
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IP: E7CB E3DC
yo wut up homie
im new to so i really got nuttin to say but it was a basic flow, jus elevate sum more n youll b another hot mc return de favor http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=97593
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12-19-03, 02:56 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
...I didn't like it...I thought is was too short and your rhyme was too simple...but...hey what do I know...???...keep up^^
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12-19-03, 02:58 PM
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IP: 9EE8 71C9
Thanx Ron D uppin'
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12-19-03, 03:01 PM
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IP: 9EE8 71C9
soz lastpoet if u didn't like it but as i said "i'm new 2 the game"
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12-19-03, 05:31 PM
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
This was ok....but it was too simple...make your lines a bit longer and keep them around the same length so its structured good and so it helps your flow out....also try adding some multies and internals to this to make it better...also try to up your vocab...keep elevating and keep at it.
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