Cremation of Souls

Silent
Pakaveli

As fear is looked dear, straight in the eye
animosity builds with strides of carelessness that collides
taunting breeding, Hurtful feelings good-bye
Waived on a decadent plateau of emancipated tears and lies
seeking of a reason for these unanswered questions
Laying helpless on thy floor covered with bruises of ones perfection
Battered dimension, trampled in digression
She searches ever more still she is a lost cause even in her reflection.
She rises to fall, crumbles to crawl
The grip of Satan chokes with such a vice grip, she see's none at all
The ocean settles crash, with a deceiving splash
For she hopes for one day to be free as the waves, free at last
Viewed as a failure, treated like a slave
The world of world war 2 relives, She only runs to live in her own grave
Her fragile fingers brush against the sands hold
Carried to her own palace of freedom, not as a life but as a cremated soul

“A cremated soul is a soul in peace”

The sapling that had thrust away the branches of care
That had snared the very essence of despair
Stared now at the outspread allegory of love
The pin pointed needles that stained the dove
Gloves made from quintessences of Satan
Drove wild boars in communities of Haitians
Quailed minds that had married love now laughed
As the alienated brethren further expired and starved
The lone sauntering shadow of a man who once breathed
Sheathed the charmed blade and then it grieved
Grieved at the state of the place that was once in grace
The place that now resembles a form laced by mace
Hindered to form beauty into a harrowing scene
The body oozes the flesh at the cremation of its being

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212644
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=229655

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A colab well done, lookin good i say

yup...waiting for some feed now...so lets go RV heads

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so dis was pretty koo fam, i t was a lil poetry for me but it was koo no doubt, it had sum good deep shit at times

return da favor on my new open mic, rise to power

i will RTF if you leave proper feed.......

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real feed?
wat r u talk'n bout fam?

detail it man if your gonna leave feed like that then il RTF just like that ill Copy and paste it.

you didnt even read it i bet?

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yo, wat do u want mi nigga, i read it n it was koo, wat u want me to quote sum shit from it?
take it or leave it damn, it aint even a big deal fam

its whatever my dude...you just left feed just to drop a new OM..LOL!......

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blah blah blah upping this damn this sites low..

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First good piece I have seen in Open Mic. Flowed smoothly from both. Excellent structure. Really nice read with some decent metas. I thought it was really abstract... more story telling needs to go into it...... also i thought you could have done a better job linking each other's verses..... But nonetheless, a really nice and smooth read from a couple of talented writers. See you next week in PT .

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231636

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

I'll cehck up your link soon and preciate the comments thanks

word PAKA get at me my dude...and thanks I AM WILL GET AT YOUR LINK LATER..

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this is good shit

i enjoyed both pieces equally both are equipped with nice vocabulary and good imagery overall sweet piece keep it up

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