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10-24-05, 10:21 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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Almighty Katrina (Valor ft. Atticus
IP: 2029 97B3
Valor = Blue
Atticus =Navy 'tis like the day after tomorrow, faces distort with sorrow looting for food, the neighborhoods gone, none to borrow the aftermath is insane, so many people katrina has slain destroyed beyond recognition, polluted souls with no names people evacuated quickly, and family members missing soulful humans making it to the shelter, with siblings not listing feared dead, but they pray to the savior for there safety but it's hard after the devastation to pray for help lately your property is under water, air temperature getting hotter can't swim because the water is polluted with gas, oil and copper why were'nt we warned to the fullest elevation, why such hatred her army came from no where, thousands were to die i hate this how come no one stepped up, or even attempted to say shit? In greatness, dances the rains with winds. Reigning the floor...souring the stage in sync, hand in hand... My, how beautifully they land. Intuitively sits a smile... The two hate to dance. Room sits with jaws long, an awe sat stunned. Watch the two fuse together, then fall as one. Croud drownding in the blanks of speculation's gaze, unaware in their eyes lies a lie emulating a hate. Audience bows to the raw talents that cloud, cover, shelter the weather and get lost in the now. After their dance, all sea the real song... As notes tickle the dammed and fiddle a kiss from Katrina.
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10-24-05, 10:22 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212463
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=212622
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10-24-05, 10:37 PM
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Word homie this was a dope drop... damn you valor i was loving your drop..nice multies, good flow..and very vivid imagery , i was really feeling everything you were saying ...good emotions and feeling , nice job from your behalf...Atticus..you also had a nice drop..nice imagery,...good emotions , nice wordplay but i felt you could have came alittle better...overall nice drop both of you ..keep it up..and this would have been better if i was in it
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10-26-05, 01:29 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
soild as fuck.
Old school representing like crazy with this. Id feed,but i seen this before you dropped it  |
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10-27-05, 10:44 AM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 21D9 C3FE
deep topic, nice flow, good point i was feeling both verse good drop ya no dout 8/10
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10-27-05, 05:09 PM
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IP: 4E09 BD1F
i really like this piece....becuze i was in katrina with 5 1/2 ft of water full of oil and shit....very nice vocab....the flow was overall good but was choppy in a place or 2 in the second verse...it really did paint a picture and actually took me back to the hurricane.....which i dont liek to replay in my head but this was different....it was a dope drop to be honest and a nice piece that actually described real emotions happining during and after katrina
keep it up
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10-29-05, 12:09 PM
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Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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good piece plade topic but better than ive seen it on here
vocab of course was good for both same with strucutre flow could have been better but not bad at all valors peice was worded great there were alot of places where if you would have worded it wrong it would have been ass but u didnt so props atticus's piece was more o nthe storm thatn the pp,l so you both touched on diferent topics which i like 9/10
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10-29-05, 03:23 PM
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Those line's were dope atty'. Your emotion was pretty strong, felt that in the quoted lines. Flow was pretty consistant, but your verse had a poetic feeling to it > an OM. Valor, Nice drop, however I feel you could have improved upon your rhyme scheme and vocab, a little. your flow was pretty good, as was your imagery. All in all, nice collab I wasnt in Katrina but I went there to help..
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10-31-05, 02:09 AM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
thanks upping this.
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11-02-05, 01:10 AM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
upping - this be that hall of fame shit yo
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11-02-05, 07:32 AM
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Black Poet
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IP: 2041 AFC0
Sup both come nice,... I like the way both writers have the two different
styles Att come well dope in this really complex lines that flowed really well with dope emotions. Valor I liked the inners you kicked on the first bar made the flow start off sic you emotions was dope and it flowed really well. Really decent drop by both stay up 1~ |
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11-02-05, 07:51 AM
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Flyweight
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IP: 60C4 4739
any helpful emotional feeling that goes towards other humans crises is pure dope
wish yall wouldve gone a lil farther with it wouldve liked to hear (err read) more but who am i nice drop keep blessing 1 |
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11-02-05, 09:40 PM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
werd uppupp....
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05-31-06, 03:21 AM
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A Reflection Of The Past
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IP: 2029 97B3
why isnt this in the hall of fame?
what a dope fucking collab honestly 2 legendary rv members with a dope collab wtf.
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05-31-06, 10:36 AM
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Flyweight
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IP: 3D6E 1623
this is a nice peice duke... I was feelin it all tha way through na mean it should be in tha hall of fame fa real this shit was hot.. they sleepin on this man
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