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Old 12-28-04, 01:57 PM   #16
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Sorry I just got back from San Francisco @ 12:00 last night....So I did a quick 25 or less minute key and don't have any time....please don't bitch and try to d/q me cuz I went to sleep today and got up to start my verse....good verses boht of you and good luck....sorry if somethings worng w/ my verse Ill fix it later
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Old 12-28-04, 02:03 PM   #17
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"True knowledge exists in knowing that you know nothing."
-Old Proverb
"Ignorance is belief of false ideas which plague society.....therefore we exist as ignorance."
-BigChase

The City of Angels, our country's basic need
Pure harmony in a nation found on greed
We didn't want Brittain's taxes for defending us
So we rebelled and gave the revoloution a thrust
prepared to die for freedoms being stolen
the rights outbalance our wrongs, our good golden
Our country found, a flag sood proud
Yet the corruption in liberty stood sound
Tradegies are just mankinds second flaw
Upholding our desire for money with law
A war between brothers devided our cause
The nation split into two and called civil
A root for hate and society's upheavel
I call upon the hour glass to reflect time hovering
We tried to stop a new form of governing
Share with the people no privileged just poor
But the evil didn't let the towntrodden system open the door
We started war, yet not officialy
without consulting congress, yet they were let free
Now were in countries attacking with superior intelligence
Destroying those who wronged innocent people without political revelevance
We aren't free just a target for seizure
Libery has had wars, but none please her
Maybe there are patriots, our freedom, in our hearts a peice
Ignorance is thinking there exists a country of peace



..:Los Angelas 1992:..
We met and loved, our hearts mated love as they met
her chest contained my chest, a merge of hearts in breasts
Our time of greeting a turmoil in time leading to mind's riots
households held with silence as authority beheld violence
our hands together in solemnity, yet love as young as blosom of rose
watered by god's grace, with mercy our bond steadily grows
the smell sweet to bless my senses, yet the bond reconciles
only envy was grief, as he wished his own seed on us in denial
It never spread, contained within the breatching depths of our win
Her smile gentle enticing me with her glow, she pulled me within
.......................Then it happned........the peace breaks
The yelling outside as the Network reveales the destruction evil makes
The ground quakes, helicopters overpass, our whole complex shakes
Officers aqquited caused instant destruction, leaving us in its wake
Dust flairs, carried by the smoke and air, as molotiv cocktails enter our home
As smoke and fire reign, I call her name and realize my breath is alone
The building collapses, the front door locked, my doom is certain
My only hope is through the ring of flames, my source of attack behind curtains
I run and grimace as my flesh seared, the glass intensifies
I escape my doom into the wilderness surrounded by other's demise
The cries in the street as men pulled our of their cars and beaten
The devil merry with is tricks and deception, the chaos to him sweetens
My thorats one solitary purpose to recall my love to its home
The Queen that rules over me back to its throne
In the distance the black violence is penitrated by a star
The brightest light on earth is dousing evil's marr
Our eyes met in the rejoice of a thousand reunitfication
A brilliant hope on this dark clouded nation
Hand in hand our fate soon decimated by accidental probability
I see a Exxon truck hijacked within periphial visual capabilities
On its side it slides puncturing on the asphault in a aray of sparks
The only light soon engulfs us as a fireball appears in the dark
Fire spreads, like the love in our hearts did when we embraced
.....Flames seared my skin......yet our hearts still raced
Minute turns into hours, together yet were one alone
the rain of demise shrouds the light a new dimiension zones
the sky shed tears of blood, it's cries pour into my ethereal hands
An ultimate sacrifice our love with evil's demands
Two lovers die yet their love lives unknown all this steming from ignorance
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Old 12-28-04, 04:31 PM   #18
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Before i start i would just like to say all three of you had very good verses and i give props to all three of you...

Emotion: I would have to give this to Nos... His emotion really drew me into his piece and it made his piece stick out in my mind more then any of the other pieces dide... The emotion was very strong and it had me hooked from the opening of your piece...

Imagery: Would have to say this is a tie between Big Chase and Elematal Soul... Their imagery in their pieces was simply outstanding... Both pieces portrayed pictures in my mind and they where both two different angles of the topic... But i would just have to give it to Elematal just beucase of the scratching the arm thing really worked...

Vocabulary: Nos had some complex vocab in his verse and it didnt seem forced while as chase i didnt really see to much complex vocabluary in your verse and elematal soul's vocab seemed forced in some places so this would have to be given to Nos...

Complexity: Once again im going to have to give this to Nos... Your verse was very simplistic and complex at the same time... I liked the choice of wording the and way your portrayed your story in this piece...

Creativity: All three came with different angles on the topic so i really cant give this catagory to any of you...


Vote: Nos... Chase you could have probably gotten this had you spent some more time on your verse but you had to rush it so there for Nos gets the win

Good battle once again to all three of you... Much respect
 
Old 12-28-04, 04:32 PM   #19
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And yeah I. Mind my bank account is in Led Poetics profile... that is banned for three days so i cant acces it at the moment...
 
Old 12-29-04, 01:37 PM   #20
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i though nos had the better emotion on thisit was very deep....imagery was bigchase slightly better that elemental soul....nos came more complex....
soiif id vote it would be nos....

1. nos
2.bigchase
3. e. s.
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Old 12-29-04, 11:55 PM   #21
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2-0-0..

I want to lick my own nuts
sorry was bored
I rushed so i didnt have time to downsize it sorry
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Old 12-30-04, 07:24 AM   #22
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i was known as a newbie on this site. but ended up a finalist against to mods. what does that tell ya'll?
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sorry im bored too
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Old 12-30-04, 07:25 AM   #23
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i was known as a newbie on this site. but ended up a finalist against two mods. what does that tell ya'll?
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sorry im bored too

this battle lacks votes
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Old 12-30-04, 09:41 AM   #24
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I think that Nostradamus got this battle because i feel that Nostradamus came stronger in the following categories...Topic i felt Nostradamus got it was effective and was on point both shoulda been a bit more creative on this occasion rhyming i felt went to Nostradamus good lookin wordplay and creativity goes to Nostradamus and flow and structure i'll give to Nostradamus.

V/Nostradamus

2nd Place i reckon wasBig Chase had a good verse but didn't have what it took to beat Nos on this occasion.

The MC came 3rd for me but dawg had an aight topical verse keep at it you'll elevate naturally...
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Old 12-30-04, 09:54 PM   #25
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1.Nos
2.Big Chase.
3. Elemental Soul

nos just came with better emotion as usual.. but i was feeling big chase's story... this was a real good battle good job to all three..
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Old 12-31-04, 03:12 PM   #26
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I'm deleting MC Streak's vote because he just put nos takes this describe your votes....I hope Elemental or osmeone gets some votes and makes nos sweat

Buddahs can be d/q if Elementasl wants it cuz he didn't mention him except in place

Just trying to be fair
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Old 12-31-04, 05:41 PM   #27
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buddhas vote is trash and nonsense. and gangstarshit's vote was garbage as well,and he told me to elevate? im WAAAAAAAAAAYY more experienced then that kid. im sorry RV but these votes are really fucken stupid. my overall net record is like 35 sumthin wins and like around 13 losses. peeps gotta understand that im NOT a newbie at text and that my verse TOOK EFFORT so vote fair and actually read the peices carefully.
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Old 12-31-04, 08:50 PM   #28
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My overall net record is over 400 wins and less than 50 losses..

So let me be the first to give a royal fuck you.. And in tournaments like this people are entitled to post opinions.. If someone posts that I win without explaining. BIG DEAL. I think you people dont understand how most sites work because of the way the battle voting systems are worked here..

What your saying is because he didnt leave a well thought out few paragraphs of a vote his post should be deleted.. Thats fucking nonsense.. I would hate for you people to go to another site where they dont have the battle system of RB and RV and watch as people come in and give one line votes without polls, or any numbers going up on your rec..

I've said it heaps of times, and I'll say it again, battling is not poke'mon, its supposed to be a fun thing to do while your not making tracks and to get your name out.. The way you kids are complaining about votes is pathetic.. Grow up.. This tournie doesent even have prize money..

BTW Elemental soul, do your research before you make claims.. GSS has another alias called Mad Dog with a combined rec of over 40 wins. Not to mention his account on RB.

OH, and one more thing. You wrote about someone getting their hat stolen and wanting to kill someone over it. The fact that you used a bunch of descriptive words in between about him crying over it doesent nessecarily make it dope as you think it is. Sorry thats just the way I feel.
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Old 01-01-05, 06:45 AM   #29
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shut the fuck up nos. see your starting with me, i didnt say shit about you. YOU started nigga. my story was true, it wasnt no made up shit i used for a topical. IT was a TRUE STORY ABOUT SOMETHING THAT HAPPENED TO ME THAT CHANGED MY LIFE SO FUCK YOU BITCH. POKEMON??? WTF ARE U TALKEN ABOUT. THIS WAS FUN FOR ME,THIS WAS ALL COOL AT FIRST. BUT THEN I START REALIZING HOW FUCKED UP SHIT IS IN THIS SITE INCLUDING ALL RAP SITES. IT MAY BE ALL FUN AND GAMES AND ELEVATION, BUT TO SAY THAT I NEED ELEVATION IS STUPID BECAUSE EVERYBODY NEEDS ELEVATION. NOBODY IS PERFECT AND ITS STUPID THE WAY PEOPLE THINK.SEE MY THEORY IS THAT IF BUDDHA WAS A NEWBIE,HIS VOTE WOULD BE DELETED CUZ HE WOULDNT BE AS RESPECTED. ITS LIKE SCHOOL, THE "STRONGER LOOKING GUYS" GET ALL THE RESPECT AND NEVER REALLY GET FUCKED WITH. THE "WEAKER PUNY LOOKING GUYS WILL GET SHITTED ON" YOU GOTTA GET THAT THRU YA THICK SKULL NOS. AND I DID NOT START THIS, YOU STARTED IT AND SAID SOME UN-CALLED FOR SHIT NIGGA. YOU STARTED IT BITCH,SO DONT COME OUT ACTEN LIKE YOUR SOME WISE EMCEE MASTER THAT CAN MAKE ME LOOK LIKE THE FOOLISH KID, WHEN YOUR THE IGNORANT BELLIGERENT SLOB, AND IM THE BENEVOLENT NIGGA JUST FIGHTEN FOR WHATS RIGHT SO FUCK YOU AND BTW,GOOD JOB ON BITING MY "PEACE TO ALL AND GOODNIGHT CONCEPT FOR THE ENDING"
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Old 01-01-05, 07:03 AM   #30
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Alright look.

Let me explain shit to you. You are trying to get votes removed and stop people from having their say. Its a free world, if you want to make this shit go to 5 votes wins, then dont count those posts as votes.. Like I care. I dont think you won anyway, I think its mainly between me and Big Chase. SORRY to burst your bubble.. Thats just my opinion.

And I agree everyone needs elevation.. Son I make alias's all the time and get told to keep elevating by idiots that I'd beat in a second.. Do you want a medal?

OH, and btw, if u didnt realise, I copied your peace all and goodnight shit as a joke fool.. Have a sense of fucking humor..
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