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Old 07-25-05, 09:46 AM   #1
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LW TITLE: Sixth Sense (4-3) vs. E.C (3-3)

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Battles up Monday - Check In by Wednesday - Drop by Friday - Votes by Sunday

No line limit and the battler with most votes by Sunday night is the winner. If this is a topical battle, write a topical and not a poetic drop and the same is vice a versa.

All Battlers must vote on 4 other battles and leave their voting links in their battle thread. Battles voted on may be from either poetry or topical battles. If vote threads aren't in your battle thread by sunday you will suffer a loss by Disqualification.

Extensions must be asked for by Thursday night by pming any of the mods (Acuity, Drama Queen & Elementality). No extensions will be given 4 if asked 4 on Friday night. Extensions are only given till Sunday night at the most. If you dont ask for an extention, and drop whenever you feel like it you will be Disqualified. Do not abuse extentions, they are not to be used if you're just too lazy to drop within the confines of the circumstances. Leave reasonable explanation for your absense. If the League notices you are a slacker due to this nature you will be banned for being out-right slothfully callous.

Every battler must nominate (not their own) one topical and poetry battle for pieces of the week, in the main forum. People with pieces of the week shall have their drops stickied and placed in the Pieces Of Inspiration sub forum

Don't ho-show because you will be banned if you do it twice. We can understand you cannot drop due to certain circumstances but if this happens a second time, you're banned from the league for 2 weeks. If you signed up for both leagues and you no-show in one league twice, you will be banned in both leagues!

Try to limit the freeposts, we will have a chat/beef thread for that. Also give fully explained votes, if not your votes won't count!


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Old 07-25-05, 10:06 AM   #2
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ok this is a nice topic to do....yea checkity checkmate e.c. g/l man........
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Old 07-25-05, 02:13 PM   #3
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check.... i got this g'luick to you aswell mate
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Old 07-28-05, 09:09 AM   #4
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Con~Sequences

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...The actions that I made took the final flight
I gripped my hand but I always used to gripe
Freely within myself it started to escape, my soul
Until some actions that I just couldn’t barely control...


The sequences of my life went by so fast and turned into pieces
My sins and deeds were made into one form through the thesis
All that it could find was locked in a cage philosophical rage
That I express my emotions on this... fucking old page
My life actions, too deep to swallow fully, I’m depressed
Never will tell if it’s a fake or the truth but I still confessed
That these actions I receive are about to withhold my stress
That I feel boredom in my mind when my heart feels interest
All u can see is lies, now that u know the truth in the eyes
Of the beholder I think in my mind that this story is to be wise
I give out actions to follow but for some reason I wont obey
So finally I find the final way, and start to say what I have to say

“ The consequences I took were looking and started the escaping
The hole in the mind was enough to escape it was a humungous gaping
Followed the sins and deeds to my heart inside the esophagus plagued
There laid the tombstone of the things I said in my head where I played
But why was this happening to me as I saw the reason, it was on purpose
I went up to reach my nostrils and sneezed as I came out onto the surface
Wet around me, as in a different plateau just so deep in a different level
So much steel I felt the metal, that’s the way I started to see who was the rebel”

...After all these phrases, im on a summit
Can see all the faces, and land on my stomach
The the eye that focused light, I could see the lenses
The sequences were lies as I just told u my con~sequences...

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i used consequences in a different way con~sequences that means con=lies sequences=actions.....its jus in a different way.......
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Old 07-29-05, 08:23 AM   #5
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Consequences

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As i sit here cold, all on my own, the floor is freezing,
a bag of loot by my side, and my stomache is bleeding,
i start heaving, believing that god isnt with me today,
he's saying all those bad things you've done, it's time to pay,
my life aint over, it's just begun, i'm living an honest life,
it pays big, no need to lie........... i only carry a knife,
hitting one bank after another, times can only get better,
untill this day i was shot, gloomy, it left me deader than weather,
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It started on a cold day, the ice drops were frozen,
the light shined on me, like it was me being chosen,
my time to shine? but i didn't think i could do it,
too many times before, but i guess i gotta go through it,
one more time and its a big break, if it goes to plan,
so i take a gun, and secure it in my right hand,
walk up to the entrance, stare at the clerk, she screamed,
i burst open the door, and shouted " EVERYONE PLEASE LEAVE!",
shots of sharp sounds surrounded the building, they ran,
i walked up to the desk with the gun in my hand,
"PUT THE MONEY IN THE BAG BITCH, DON'T TRY ANYTHING STUPID",
she started shaking and crying, i could tell she was a new kid,
barely in her 20's blonde hair, pretty stunning from back here,
i stare into her eyes gently all she did was track fear,
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I've got the money, lets break, sirens start to crowd the area,
helicoptor in the sky, swat came, which made things alot scarier,
kill or be killed, "FUCK IT" i let loose with the pistol, capping cops,
killing all the mother fuckers, untill there backing stops,
i made a run for it, 3 shots in my back, i turned round to shoot,
got another one in my stomache, there was no sign off the loot,
i saw it fly in the air, i started crawling "DAMN I NEED TO GET UP",
started running slowley, fast as i could then i got fed up,
my time has come, it was meant to be "NO LOOKING OUT?"
"GOD I THOUGHT WE WERE BOYS THAT HELPED WHEN IN DOUBT!",
"Sorry son, your time has come" " WELL I SUPPOSE IT'S GOODBYE",
there is consequences for all your actions................................
............................now it's my turn to take that trip to the sky!,
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Old 07-29-05, 02:09 PM   #6
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Sixth Sense:


Decent verse, i think you could have wrote it a little better. Your imagery was ok but you should work on that a bit more. Be more descriptive in some areas. Your vocabulary was great though and that made up for some the abscence of imagery. The story was a little foggy in my eyes, it really didnt point out much about consequences and i understand you broke the word down to use it better but i think you could have wrote something more entertaining.

Overall: 6.4/10

E.C. :

You also had a decent verse, i liked the plot of the story and the idea behind it, but that idea has been used a million times. Be more creative with the storyline next time, use a different set up or a different ending for your story. The whole "doing something illegal and dying" bit is played out but you were still original in your story. Decent vocabulary, imagery was on point, and your verse flowed off the tongue pretty well. I think you took this battle but you could have been more creative.

Overall: 7.1/10


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Old 07-30-05, 05:59 AM   #7
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k will do that next time thanks for the vote....
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Old 08-01-05, 06:33 AM   #8
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Voting is closed, E.C wins
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