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08-01-05, 08:51 AM
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Odi et Amo
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Drama Queen vs. Stanza
IP: 1EAF 3328
You can find the rules if you follow this link: !Rules! Read em... Check in by Wednesday Pieces due by Friday Voting closes by Sunday Topic: Everyone wears a mask
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08-01-05, 11:50 AM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 3240 794D
Checkin In ..........................................
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08-01-05, 12:44 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 1EAF 3328
Checkity Check Check
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08-05-05, 02:59 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 0863 A6B6
…Nothing is ever what it seems… While I risk my life fighting fascist regimes and seeking extremes My daughter’s uttering screams because of ongoing bad dreams I’m leading a hectic double life: undercover cop, mother and wife One day I slice bread with a knife, the other I use it to end strife But she cannot understand why mommy does things unplanned And it gets harder to stand how she always pulls away her hand Since it’s hard for her to grasp that every person wears a mask All these questions she would ask when I’m here to fulfill a task Sometimes I think about giving it all up and that I’ve had enough But I know it’s all bluff cause I’m back at it when stuff gets rough And the danger of it all is becoming a stranger in a rise and fall Crash my head into brick wall for such camouflage can enthrall …Everyone wears a mask… Aren’t we naïve to still believe in things we think we can perceive? When we are oh so easily deceived and illusions is all we receive Tricks played, putting up a masquerade as the truth slowly fades In many different shades that hold more sly games than arcades How can I still have trust when loyalty is just as stable as dust? ‘Cause lust now replaced love as a must, filling me with disgust I’m looking into people’s eyes to see what’s behind the disguise But all I seem to find are lies that arise as our society’s demise
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08-05-05, 03:43 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: 0825 899A
...Who Are The People Who Wear The Mask?... The People Who Wear The Mask Are The People Who Want To Be Someone Else Him, Her, Me, or You The People Who Were The Mask Seem To Be That One Person Who Really Didnt Like Me And Wanted to Be Me Inside But Hid It Away So People Couldnt See When They Came Our Way People Who Pretend to Be Or People Who Despise Their Past Are The People Of Whom I Think And Know Wear The Mask .....Are You One of Those People Who Wears A Mask?..... ......................Check YourSelf................................... Goodluck! |
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08-05-05, 03:49 PM
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The Truest TRUTH
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IP: 0D11 88C9
man this was very one sided here stanza-it looked like u didnt even try didnt even ahve that many lines to build anything in it really and if it was that few then u shulda at least came up wit more creativity and better vocabulary then jus ending wit simples rhymes like who and u, way and away......DQ-u did a very good job very good at emotions there and vocabulary was good both stayed on topic though but really DQ had the emotions,vocab,creativity just better cuz stanza didnt really show that much of anything really.....so my v/ Drama Queen.......
. . . . . ......PLZ RTF IN MY TOPICAL BATTLE IN HIGHER THINKING WIT A HONEST VOTE.......
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08-05-05, 06:02 PM
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: B12C B172
Drama Queen - I gotta say this... I Liked That Alot... You took this topic in a very well put manner. You were serious, and to the point with it. I like that. Your vocab was nice, and the flow was nice as well. You structure was on point, and the delivery of the hole thing was good... I cant say much more than that... Good Work Gurl
Stanza - LoL, I liked to read it... Because it made since. But as being a battle there really aint much to say. I wish it were longer and you took more time to be more creative and all of that with it... LoL Vote - Drama Queen ( Yall please make an honest vote on Troop and my battle... )
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08-05-05, 06:43 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 95C5 A90F
stanza u aint beatin DQ in 8lines unless every line is on point...ur lines werent...
VOte - drama Queen DQ camesub-par but dope bar: Tricks played, putting up a masquerade as the truth slowly fades In many different shades that hold more sly games than arcades ^wordplay 4 yo assssssssssss RV  meh at this battle overall...one of the less gd this round
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08-07-05, 03:56 PM
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New to RV
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IP: 3037 50B7
DQ - Nice internal usage. I mean realli on point and clean. Nice storyline and good dictin. But it feltvery piece meal though. Iunno I got that feeling from it. THat there were details left to be described.
Stanza - Im sory man. It wasn't clean at all. You wrote like a very short poem that didn't have much effect at all. Keep working on it man. Vote = DQk she was complete and complex.,
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08-08-05, 07:16 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: E722 4FE7
Drama Queen wins and advances to the second round
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