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08-01-05, 08:53 AM
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Odi et Amo
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High Class vs. Troop
IP: 1EAF 3328
You can find the rules if you follow this link: !Rules! Read em... Check in by Wednesday Pieces due by Friday Voting closes by Sunday Topic: Rise and Fall
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08-01-05, 12:45 PM
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: B12C B172
Check Check... G/L
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08-01-05, 02:56 PM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: FFBA C081
Dun Deal....
Chek Move...
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08-04-05, 12:21 AM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: FFBA C081
*4 Am in the Morning....Sweat Drops Repulsing off my ForHead..* *Looks into the Mirror...Grippling the Marble SiDes of the Sink.* So this is whats it come to?...Hm Hm..Look at your Self Everyone Fucking KNows Now...Fuckin Look at your Stealth If Not notice Anything Else...........Shit Look at your Health Results of The Gambling on Your Team..Shit Look at your Shelf The Storys Bold..Trillion Plus times Told..Of how the Story Unfolds From Translucent Hoes....Destinctevly Diseases Lurking UnKnown True Your P's and Q's were Fluently Used.......Notice the Bruise? That Pretrudes out of my Image Dude............Me Neva did Lose Top Ten Pick in the Nation................Jus for Competivly Racein Slowly ..........The Fabric of Successfullnes Slowly Was Laced iN Massive Tv Appearances........Debt Dissappearments Clearances Massive Abs...Chest Won me Ass...Plus Millions were Fearin This Countless Events of Competition Repents.....I Guaranteed Victory But the AntiBiotics got Abused..Success is sweeter than Hickory Only When you Let It Be... *Spreads a Coccaine Line Across the Sink*.... Ahhhh...Fuck that This is the Answer..ThaT Ends the Questionary In the Track & Field Hall of Fame....Hmmmmm The Guests'es Vary Millionaire Stacked Plaques.........Infilitrated my 200 + Acre Flats Until the Tests came Back...Awwww Snaps..... forgot the Patch That Would of Meant..Passing Non Positive Thru my UrinRy Tract Now Investigations are Claimin..that im a Cheat in my Profession True i did White for Only a Night...But Addict? Notice Progression of my Agression..That Turned Violently Tragick...Back Hand I Did 2 Charges Domestic Spousle Assault..Not Guilt................,,,I Bid Judges Held Grudges..That this White Girl Showed Signs of Abuse Gettin Butt Fucked During Countless Nights Suck...I call a Truce So Being a 200 Pound Prison Clicks Bitch....Shit i had to get Use 20 Yrs in Prison for a Decision that Inflicted my Life that was New On Parole for Months Swole..I kno I knO...But my Freedom I Blew ...Fearing Suicide Abducts the Lies in My Life ...that i must Fight But takeing Everything From my Existence..Tell me ...Is it Right? *Possissions Barrel at Temple* Fuck it.....U figure it it Out....But only 2 U i sub due My Rights 2night..
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08-04-05, 11:46 PM
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: B12C B172
ima put my shit up tommorow after football practice... so dont think ima no show...
aight
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08-05-05, 02:37 PM
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: B12C B172
“Rise and Fall” Intrigued To see Money… Love hungry… yet still caught and seized Sexual paraphernalia producing a life line… Not fought or grieved Except sought for greed… An unearthly want thought as need Destruction not cropped but freed… under sex for money… rots and bleeds Once amazing… Once young… Now aged and only fading Lonely awaking… Living lost, at costs that are not broken but breaking She’s not spoken, but waiting… Pointless but clueless… horrible yet amazing Entrapped in a craving… of self destruction endlessly elevating Satan’s atmosphere… amongst homicide…rape… grey skies and lies Goodbyes and Sighs… Bad decisions and mass collisions from which derived… A child of prostitution, struggling to redeem… Protrude through the seems of hell… climb the chains of the constitution Odds favor death… Savior and protection reveal to be an allusion Solutions approached… Committed intrusions repeating confusion (Think For A Second) So who’s using what… in this case, who’s doing who??? Visions distorted and intoxicated… On a line not straight but screwed On a mind scrapped and bruised… of a mind hatful and shrewd Diving down a drain… Of filth, surrounded by the faith of Poo ( Reality Check ) Revered as Dirt... But understand, she was born from the ground Bottom half of a food chain… Raised into pain that can drown Insane and never found… In a game replaying in chains… maybe rounds What Birth is to harlets… What shame is given not yet found Never an honest living… Instead born in confinement An alignment so perfect… passed through in an utter sudden silence Other than that her time went… responsibility created impatience In response to here pregnancy… Nothing changed but stayed vacant Not a gain, but more abrasions… Miscarriage added to the situation Of no chance to Rise… instead sprawl and fall… Now added to the equation… ( Hope you guys understand the hole point )
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08-05-05, 03:12 PM
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Skadoosh!
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IP: 5BD6 BC30
wow, i am impressed with both these drops......
both of you delivered a real nice depiction of the topic staying on point throughout the whole thing, high class had a better flow and feel to his verse, troops sounded choppy in places and i wasn't feeling that opener, it seemed a little too basic to me, troop had the multies thrown in and they added a little extra, vocab wise high class came out the winner, he wasn't complex in all places but overall i feel he showed more complexity in his words.....both delivered a nice piece of imagery to the topic, i was feeling troop more on this one as i cud picture his verse happening more......emotion and feeling in the verse has to go to high class, his verse had more thought in it and it felt more emotional than troops whose verse seemed more flat to me.......overall each verse had its ups and downs but in the end i think high class took it by a fraction. V/ - High Class plz RTF honestly on my tournament battle.... LINK: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202505
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08-05-05, 03:59 PM
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The Truest TRUTH
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man both dropped very good here yall had everything in it to emotion, to vocabulary, imagery, and both also stayed on topic i do agree that HC had a very good verse but i really think that troop got this his verse was more appealing to imagery and had a better vocabulary really.......both did drop good im jus saying that in my opinion troop did jus a lil better by having a lil better imagery and vocab......so my v/ troop..........
. . . . . . ..........PLZ RTF WIT A HONEST VOTE IN MY TOPICAL BATTLE IN HIGHER THINKING.....
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08-05-05, 04:04 PM
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1-1...good drop Class.....
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08-05-05, 04:30 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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Troop- This was an Ok Topical verse. I felt that you could've come harder than this. I liked your vocab, you had a good balance in your piece. The Imagery was good, but next time put more Complex in it. The Emotion in this verse was the Weakiest Aspect. The Imagery was your Strongest aspect, but yet the best you've done. I like the approach and the concept.
High Class- Ok I liked your verse. You had good complexity in your imagery. The Emotion was there but you need to still work on that. You had a good balance in your vocab and the .......Between your Lines is a  Which Kills the flow in your Piece. I dont worry about Flow..New-ways. The best aspect in your verse was Imagery but the weakiest in my opinon was the "Emotion"Overall- I have to vote which one has the good imagery, most complex, and also had more deph into it. Vote High Class. His Imagery was more Complex and it drew me closer Liking his verse. Troop I liked your verse but there was a flaw in your imagery and that was "Complexity and Deph" I didnt feel it. Sorry VOte High Class.
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08-05-05, 05:01 PM
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: B12C B172
2-1 same to you Troop, this will be close from the looks of it...
( I will return all favors tonight )
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08-05-05, 06:15 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: 0863 A6B6
Lemme break this down
T.r.oo.P: first thing I noticed about your piece was the imagery because I could really picture every scene as though it was a movie flashing in front of my eyes you know. You used very vivid wordings to express what you were saying and combined this with a good amount of emotion. The emotion could have been better I suppose but your imagery makes up for that. Vocab was on point, good complexity in it. Your approach was sort of predictable I guess but you worded everything in such a clear way, you really kept the readers focused. The flow was good, kinda off here and there but you came nice with the multis and such. The story progressed nicely so overall a solid topical piece! High Class: loving this piece because to me it had some sort of poetic vibe over it. Maybe because your flow wasn't as the regular ones you know, the spaces in between words kinda ruins it but at the same time gave the piece something different you know. You managed to combine a complex vivid imagery with strong emotion, vocab was on point as well. The approach was sort of the same as Troop's so no difference in that. What I found better about your piece than Troop's was that yours had a different vibe, you left room for the readers to imagine certain things yet went nicely into detail at the same time. My vote goes to High Class...very close battle to judge in, both dropped an excellent piece 
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08-05-05, 06:32 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: 95C5 A90F
i aint delving into depths of fbak, cos most of it will have already been said...if needed by DQ ill edit with loadsa fbak
im voting troop for the simple flow of his piece, troop for it being a relaity piece...high class' drop was decent it had a lot of metapphorical lines etc which address many level...but troops was just real...i was imagining his verse anticipating lines as i was reading...higher classes drop had thee whole higher meaning thing goin on but imo he failed to maintain a constant theme or approach so it endled up as scrambled inconcise thoughts... Vote - TROOP decent battle...1
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08-05-05, 08:13 PM
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A King Missing a Queen...
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IP: B12C B172
^ Im guessin you had a hard time understandin somethin like that... so its aight, lol ^
3-2 still close Troop
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08-06-05, 12:31 AM
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To The Ground...
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IP: 889B CC97
Alright, i also though that High Class took this just to get it out early where my vote goes.
Troop - As drama said, you had great imagery and that was also the best part that stuck out to me, just by reading the first couple lines of your verse i already has guessed how it was going to turn out and i was correct, it was very predictable.. And yes, you lacked a tad in the emotion department, but the imagery still.. best ive seen in a while good job with that. Just lacked i think. High Class - You had a very good choice of rhyme scheme and just the words that you used to rhyme with the last, seemed very well thought out, not just the first thing that popped into your mind type crap, it seems like you really thought this one out well and hey, it worked.. you did a really good job with that and i thought the concept was golden.. good job. v. High Class.
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