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02-27-07, 08:25 AM
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Herb
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Runnin tha show
IP: 21ED 60C1
Jays here runnin the show so hyped im on the go - go - go
its immence this ive got skill to be Don Trumps apprentice im elite a lyrical destructor build my empire be ma own conducter im the newest contender - niggas white flag surrender im hot on my heels spinnin ma wheels u sat on ur arse while im signin record deals ur triana commit crimes - well not on jays time. UR GOIN NO WHERE ive got ya locked up read ur lyrics again dawg "oops u cocked up" like galileo ill find uranus and beat it i can do this eyes closed jands behind ma back ill stay seated this is J-time the elitest. *note galileo was the dawg that found all the planets including uranus*
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02-27-07, 08:26 AM
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Herb
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IP: F7E3 42B8
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239528
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=240259
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02-27-07, 08:29 AM
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New Jack
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IP: 81FE FA00
it was ok ,and confusing because i thought it didnt rhyme until i realize your rhymes were on the same lines,i think your verse would sound better on the mic then written
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03-02-07, 04:02 PM
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-da prophit-
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IP: CF86 0039
u have some skill some where lost in ur soul.... just dig deep and find it... try making a better structure... and ryhming better.. more vocab too. this pretty much basic and played... i know u can do better than that....no hate just honesty
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03-02-07, 09:54 PM
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New to RV
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IP: D787 61CE
going along with what tha last guys have said, you need to learn tha basics... put more effort into not coming off like a school kid smoker and if ur guna keep doin tha gangsta thing, audio is the only way to go... text just inst worth anything in tha gangsta scene... most importantly you just gota keep spittin and if you want you're stuff to get better it will
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03-08-07, 12:23 PM
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New to RV
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IP: 2303 05E1
too short. you were killin it, you should have kept goin
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