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02-01-04, 02:41 AM
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Stay and Remain
IP: 7039 2C2E
why do you chose to stay and remain?
with the field a heap of your comrades slain and the insturment with blood's fresh stain while the roots of memory grow insane despatch ur kin with thrust and bain poison hills of lands estranged as you continue to fill the graves lined with remenance of enchanted days with hopes of dreams past regained consumed readily to oponents gain as the lust of mars doth refrain why do you chose to stay and remain? fear of change's aftermath yet steped readily into its path do you not remember forbarer's pain? while roots of memory grow insane to the heavens motives inane as contenents crumble for fallen names while roots of memory grow insane why do you chose to stay and remain? no explanations, i don't believe in those. i'd rather u try to find ur own meaning (it's there, u just gotta look for it). gimme links and i will reply to ur shit. thanks. Last edited by krakajack : 02-01-04 at 03:05 AM. |
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02-01-04, 12:45 PM
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IP: 0D19 5A84
damn, people must not like reading my poems. up.
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02-01-04, 11:40 PM
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IP: CD1F 9D7D
FEED? PLEASE? up. i'll reply to anyone who replies to mine, jus drop a link.
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02-02-04, 12:09 AM
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That's Right...I'm White
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IP: A735 F71F
sorry for this getting slept om...
but yeh, the meaning i kinda found like war or something like, why od they stay in Iraq when we caught buddy, or soemthing along those lines, i'm probly totally off, but o well. NOw for the the poem itself it was pretty good, simple structure, good flow, and somple vocab, nice poem, i liked it keep droppin peace |
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02-03-04, 08:20 PM
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IP: 3229 2CCB
alright, thanks for the feed man. unfortunetlly this is still gettin slept on pretty hard. uppin once again.
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02-05-04, 10:42 PM
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IP: C6ED 9E86
hello out there, anyone home?
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02-07-04, 03:36 PM
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IP: 37A2 2804
i don't understand, y doesn't anyone like to read my poetry? i feel sad
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02-07-04, 03:45 PM
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shawty"B"
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IP: C1DA C961
dont feel sad!!! this is a gud poem, i think that the imagey is right along the lones of wat krem sed, it gives off a vibe of war.........i think this is a gud peice tho cuz war is sucha big part of lyf rite now....
....................fav part.................... to the heavens motives inane as contenents crumble for fallen names while roots of memory grow insane why do you chose to stay and remain? keep droppin....... my utha peices sweet caress rewind time so many
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JUST TRY AND STOP ME !! ........Shangri La........ |
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