Pulled by a horse drawn carriage, the lone gladiator stood tall
Horses were kickin and sneering, as the cheering crowds applauds
Hes the celestial son, like a torch, he lifts the mic up into the air
Drawing energy with a gravitational pull as emcees cop his debonair
He's charismatic and earthly, ladies are drawn to his charm
Fellas like his explosiveness, as he kills with the swing of his arm
He'll break the necks of opposition, as they twist in a vortex of rhyme
But hes warm in the heart in spite of his bloodshot fire-ry eyes
His fingers are worn and calloused from wielding his mic flippin tricks
However hes cool and calculated, ready to decimate at his finger tips
Turning bitch after each single bitch, slaying cats as they slip and trip
As they fall, they’ll get slit with a verbal barrage and die at a blood drip
Stripping emcees lives, the crowd responds to his acts with roaring thunder
He’ll cast aside no one as he’ll battle each man and send him asunder
There he is once again, still in the middle of the arena as the wind blows
Swirling the dust around him, crawling up his legs like mini tornados
Fleshed in armor, the valiant gladiator will face his deadliest opponent
His tongue is sharper than ever, his cleverness wets itself to become potent
His head is bent down, as he reaches for his most powerful oral assaults
To earn heavens crown, he needs to destroy the king of orderly exalt
The guards bring in his opponent, draped in a sheet, now he holds no bounds
They let him out and set him directly facing the Champ, let out the hounds
They pull back the sheet, now he stares at himself in front of a mirror
There is no one in the game, that this heroic cat could ever fear more
He said look out the champ is back hold your breath and bite your tongue
Sit down and shut up, he will annihilate everyone with his spoken guns

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nice piece.....
imagery n vocab was good, but it doesnt really go anywhere
seems to be just describing a person
would be a lot better with more multis and rhymes inside of the lines
i like the ending, with the opponent he fears being himself

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i agree nice piece i liked the imagery. the vocab was nice and baiscally everything was on point just like homeboy said should've put more meaning behind it rather describing but it was good nonetheless...keep up ma hit me up on my new shit rtf ty peace

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my new shit peep

Nice Imagery On This....Good Description From the Very Beginning.....Opener Seemed Like Gladiator...lol.....Nice Rhyming And Good Topic....Overall Nice Job....RTF Nena....

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nena?................

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lol, forget about it.....it's something hispanic......

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Word up nice drop i was really feeling it your structure was on point you had nice imagery , and good feeling i was really feeling your wordplay and vocab usuage you had a very nice and creative concept i was really feeling this drop keep it up.

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for teh most part this was decently worded with well thought out symatery between lines... though a line here and a line there were awardly worded... this was a decent read with good imagery... you painted the picture of what was going on with ease... You also had a really good use of vocabulary... with that being said there was nothing in this that really stands out... no over whelming bars, or amazing lines... solid... but not blazing piece...

*Vanishes*

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Nice Piece Black....Good Imagery, Nice Vocab, Ya Structure Was On Point, Da Topic Was Da Shit.! So Keep Up Da Good Work. N RTF On My New OM "Dreamin Of Reality"....1

This was real good. The way you illustrated the similies and metaphors in this and compared it to a gladiator. This is a very difficult thing to do, write about something and compare it to something using mainly metas, so, props for that. I thought that everything else was fine, shorter bars coulda made for a more appealing read but i still enjoyed it lots. nice job.
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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

I was feeling this nice twist at the end,. good imagery, I felt u could have
gone more indepth and more emotional at the end,...

But it was a nice drop, flow was good, good use of vocab, used some nice
words in there like vortex and debonair nice.. the rhyming could have been
a lilttle more conplex but thats cool. decent emotions could have gone a
little more deep.

Overall really nice drop

stay up

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