They say aspiring astronauts are admiral souls
Advocating life’s questions by amending a role
They’re consoled by a zephyr’s breeze… eased
By a better tether chaining Earth to human beings
Space is perceived as
“The infinite extension of the three-
Dimensional region… in which all matter exists”
But to me it seems to be an end to a means
Where bliss escapes me and explores my needs
I employ these themes, different as contrasted, but
Sometimes I wonder…
“Does space go on forever?
Or do we just make it such?”
I had a hunch, go in search, find truth and live life
But as infinite was defined by…
“Unlimited in spatial extent”
…………………………………My insight died…
I knew I’d never know the answers until life passed
Or else I’d be chasing something that didn’t exist.
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Have you ever heard the tale of a child so weary
To ask out a girl that he loved so dearly?
He’d write “sincerely, anonymous” to sign his post
It was monotonous; clearly a girl can’t see a ghost
So she stopped looking, and the boy lost all hope
And the story goes; it’s the same for every timid boy
But how is timid defined?
If you say “Lacking self-confidence”
You’re out of your mind.
See, being timid is simply being shy,
Some would say that clouds sometimes hide the sky…
So we see eye to eye.
Because there are stars out there just as shy as our great sun
And another life form is likely taking to every one…
So one day when I become my own shooting star
I’ll talk to a wise and aged poet…
I know it’s not fact. It’s just space as I know it.

Black Queen - Look Out
Wicked One - Remember Me

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

nice drop homie i like how u stayed on topic all the way through welcome 2 rv but here's sum advice u gotta post ur links...2 in like normal replies or bonecollector or drake will close ur thread so jus a heads up so ya shit aint closed....rtf on my new shit titled new shit and mortal kombat

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Sup this was really dope, I can relate coz as I kid I always wanted to go in
space,.. and your always left thinking where dose space end !! and where does
it begin!! It use to well bug me.

Nice complexity,. good structure, flowed really well, good use of vocab
this was a really nice verse... The close gave it the extra kick it had
real meaning and a very good read.

Stay up

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Thanks for the feedback, leave some links.

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

yeah, this was deep....structure, i wasn't feeling it at some points, mainly because it was hard to read, a little, but meh, still very insightful and deep, really liked the second half, it was very well thoughtout on a vague, original topic, good job mate, props to ya

But how is timid defined?
If you say “Lacking self-confidence”
You’re out of your mind.
See, being timid is simply being shy,
Some would say that clouds sometimes hide the sky…

i liked those ones, good show, we should colllabo sometime, if you wanted, word, keep up

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Anyone wanna collab pm me.............

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Was he robbed of the ashphalt that cushioned his face?

looking for abit more feedback.......................................

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this is deep stuff man, you really into space huh lol, but the structure looked abit wonky, so i duno how u say ur lines, fast, or slow, eh

still you got a nice flow to it,

over all i'd give u a 6/10

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This is crazy... the concept alone makes me want to finish it off Keep it Coming.

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