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6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 11-06-04 at 11:04 PM

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Tainted has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-06-04 10:05 PM.

Elemental Soul has ACCEPTED this battle on 11-06-04 10:08 PM.

Now who does this jerk-off think he is, he's a joke,
Before self-oral he was amazed with the wonders of deepthroat
Down on his knees lickin' his fingers between gulps
And he plays with his gun, can't keep his mouth off the nozzle
Seen him walkin' from Jim McGreavy's house, forgetting to gargle
And why is he here, he has no business in rap,
Should be in a masturbation circle, fondling his jockstrap
Think you fall in to the straight group, your in the wrong margin
The rhymes so complex that they leave you lathargic
Look peeps,Never knew Slim Shady had got breast enlargements

Brooklyn kid reppin Nas,only online tho,pussy betta pause,
Ya only chance to wrap,is if u worked for santa clause,
Ya rhymes are infected,yet not sick while tainting,
Cuz ya bein torn to peices,like picaso paintings,
I see the bitch in you thru my computer,little like a splinter,
This soft tittie can only get as hard as nipples in the winter,
Ya flow's as bad as a broken faucet,u need a plumber,
You wouldn't shine if u wore a golden helmet in the summer,
I know your the stereo type,a bitch who thinks he's ghetto,
Well ya blocks wouldn't be hot,even if u burned legos,

Voted For: Elemental Soul

elemental soul came harder and had good flow needs work on punches just a little. needs to use bugger words.
tainted you had punches that were good but not hard. work on them and you'll do good.
vote=Elemental Soul.

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Voted For: Elemental Soul

Tainted

Now who does this jerk-off think he is, he's a joke,
Before self-oral he was amazed with the wonders of deepthroat
wasnt feeling the opener.
Down on his knees lickin' his fingers between gulps
And he plays with his gun, can't keep his mouth off the nozzle
Seen him walkin' from Jim McGreavy's house, forgetting to gargle
that third meta/multi throws the flow way off
And why is he here, he has no business in rap,
Should be in a masturbation circle, fondling his jockstrap
not played, but not good either
Think you fall in to the straight group, your in the wrong margin
The rhymes so complex that they leave you lathargic
at least if had a punch to it, ill give you that
Look peeps,Never knew Slim Shady had got breast enlargements
again, the third line thing isnt working


Elemental Soul

Brooklyn kid reppin Nas,only online tho,pussy betta pause,
Ya only chance to wrap,is if u worked for santa clause,
ya got a smirk, decent opener
Ya rhymes are infected,yet not sick while tainting,
Cuz ya bein torn to peices,like picaso paintings,
set up line was good
I see the bitch in you thru my computer,little like a splinter,
This soft tittie can only get as hard as nipples in the winter,
trying to compare him using HARD analogies, played
Ya flow's as bad as a broken faucet,u need a plumber,
You wouldn't shine if u wore a golden helmet in the summer,
these two lines were talking about somthing completely different. stick to a rhyme scheme, (plot)
I know your the stereo type,a bitch who thinks he's ghetto,
Well ya blocks wouldn't be hot,even if u burned legos,
closure was decent as well, if the last line was a little more lengthened this would have been good

vote: elemental soul

return the favor, seriously. then leave a link to another one of your battles.

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Voted For: Elemental Soul

elementry got this one good wordplay structre kinda weak rhymin but aight had preety flow tight structre
best line-I know your the stereo type,a bitch who thinks he's ghetto,
Well ya blocks wouldn't be hot,even if u burned legos,
tainted had bad rhymin aight wordplay not so good structre but wordplay was aight
best line-And why is he here, he has no business in rap,
Should be in a masturbation circle, fondling his jockstrap

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Voted For: Tainted

it was a tight battle and hard to decide but the sex jokes was hot even though kinda old and the flow wasn't that bad. but dawg didn't you no that this was actually true: Look peeps,Never knew Slim Shady had got breast enlargements.

soul you had a flow but lost on everything else

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Voted For: Elemental Soul

aight,
Elemental, decent verse from u here....didnt see any personals, but u had decent punches n u were consistent eit them...nothin that made me say 'dayum!' but i liked seein that u had a different approach wit some concepts....structure was on point too...

Tainted, u had a meh verse....structure was prolly the only thing goin for u here, dawg....u had punches n u were consistent, but they were basically all sex/gay jokes n shit...if u had been more creative u prolly woulda gotten my vote here...

V/ Elemental, for more overall creativity...

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