Sometimes i cry only bitter tears
Alone in my room so no one can hear
Crying only for the pain faced today
Fear, hate, and anger leaves kids in dismay
Guns trigger war battles to be fought
Soon to be another one of us in a cell to be locked
Gangs choose the colors spraypaint the grafiti
Never does anyone actually keep the treaties
Love's gone only hate remains
The next generation drives athorities insane
For this is why i cry only bitter tears
Alone in my room where only God can hear


There i edited the capslock prob.

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Hmm...interesting and a well used topic but it was alright. I liked the structure lol the caps was annoying but hey dont matter. It was a decent read. Keep spittin.

Overall grade:

6/10

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thanx fo the reply. my bad bout the capslock. peace out.

short read, but it had nice flow and i like the way the opener and closer are closely related

Good job. Flow, structure, wordplay, scheme and everything were nice. U put ur point across and u put feeling into this. Good job overall, i liked it. Keep it up. Much respect.

short and shr8 to tha point........ mild deepness