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11-27-05, 08:35 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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Limited Edition & Gkillaz05 vs. Fathom This & Devin
IP: 821E E436
 Battles up: Monday Check In: Wednesday Drop time: Friday Both members must check in. Only 1 member must drop the verse. Rules Topic: Dew Drops 16-32 Lines per member . . . . .
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11-27-05, 10:11 PM
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IP: F96F DC9E
Ight Im Checkin For Me
Fanthom Will Check Later On Tonight And Umm If We Both Agree Can We Change The Topic?
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11-27-05, 11:05 PM
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All these Dead Presidents
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IP: 8043 2CB0
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11-28-05, 09:22 AM
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Killin' G'z
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IP: D4FA A3B8
Checkin in, waitin' for LE.. do you want to drop our shit, or should I?..
...Keep the topic the same kid, whats the point of changin'?.. LE wanna do 15Lines each, or 16?..
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On The Mic I'm Number One...I'm Also Number Two...  ....Because Homie i'm The Shit!
TheB.E.S.T Crew
TAKE MY ADVICE FROM PEOPLE FROM CANADA nd FUCK YA LYFE
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11-28-05, 04:25 PM
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L.E
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IP: DB16 D9CD
Check...
I can do the first one... |
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11-28-05, 04:29 PM
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L.E
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IP: DB16 D9CD
Woops...
I misunderstood the rules... Yeah let's do 16 lines each...bring your best. |
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11-28-05, 07:39 PM
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IP: F96F DC9E
Lol I Was Like What?
We'll Prolly Drop On Friday Lol
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12-02-05, 12:38 PM
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Killin' G'z
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IP: D4FA A3B8
...Dew Drops... The tall grass...a rolling echo of life itself... Time...emotion...existense pushed and compelled... I walk through the field, reminicing my past... It's tarnished...kinda like the dew on the grass... I stroll to the tree thats alone standong aloft a misfit... A dew drop falls from a leaf...so beautifully apocolyptic... From the time the dew drop starts and hits the soil... Life can change from happiness to absolute utter turmoil... Head rushes and flashbacks spiral into my retina vision... A steady state of repition why do I stand so unforgiven..? As the dew drops I begin to feel like I was in trouble... I open my eyes...I'm in the dew drop, trapped in a bubble... I claw, tear...scream at the transparent walls, Im held back... Kinda like my life...I'm falling fast, in an unbreakable trap... All of a sudden Im standing at my grave, not able to be seen... Tears are everywhere...I wake up, and it was only a dream... Woke up in the mornin' 91.5 da beat on the alarm clock ringing
Open up my eyes, look out the window at the birds singing The moisture in the leaves cold feeling in the air from the breeze The ground is rather damp and I can see the dew drop from trees Walking around outside the temperature is just a bit nippiley Stepping out onto the grass its quite wet and slippery If you keep a clear mind and have your eyes at perfect conentrate Right before your eyes you will see the dew drops evaporate Dew drops from the logs in my garden and it is sort of foggy The dog tracked mud onto the floor n todays newspapers soggy Come back inside and have a shower, grab something to munch Open up my refrigerator quickly throw together a lunch Time to go to school, walk around to my bus stop location I take my seat cant see out the window from the condensation I get off the bus learn my education, figure out my career The sun starts rising, now the 'dew drops' slowly disappear Italic Verse - LE Normal Verse - GK
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On The Mic I'm Number One...I'm Also Number Two... ....Because Homie i'm The Shit!
TheB.E.S.T Crew
TAKE MY ADVICE FROM PEOPLE FROM CANADA nd FUCK YA LYFE
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12-02-05, 11:15 PM
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IP: F96F DC9E
Devin ~ Bold
Fanthom This ~ Italics "The Bad" Vision locked out the window, reflection shows marijuanas effects.... On the phone with my love, mind gone off, mumbling takes over my dialect... Hours fly by as if the clock were being thrown in my direction... Temperatures change as times goes on, my mood goes to intrigue from affection... Box of Sominex opened, bottle cap popped but the bottle appears empty... Her words keep me awake and angry, I downed 12 when 3 would have been plenty... Not an ounce of drowsiness, intoxication got me wired like caffeine... Watch as dry night air becomes moist morning aroma, its the most unique thing i've ever seen... 5 AM hits and news broadcast says its a cool 69 degrees w/ a mild breeze... Morning symphony as cars creep past and harmony of birds chyming in the trees... Being stoned has led me to realize one of lifes amazing features that behold... Stare around, eyes half wide, all is dry except the grass is sparkling bold... Leafe peddles bent down overweighted by dozens of water drops... Appears as resemblance of past showers, but no moisture to be found on street tops... "The Good" Bed Wet With Sweat Seems As If I've Awakin Just Before Meeting The Ground, The Light Damaging My Eyes Visulizing The Surrounding As Im Peaking Around, Strike The Alarm Clock Time Catchin The Corner Of My Eye And To My Suprise, It Was Noon Get Up Turn On A Cartoon Its Amazing How My Life Has Not Dealed Out Lies Cant Touch On Last Night And For Some Odd Reason It Seems To Not To Matter to Me Open The Front Door, Look At All The People That Know There Poor, That, Im Glad To See Perfect Circles Of Water Layin On Leaves And Dirt God's Metaphor Showin Use He Sees us Hurt He's Sayin The Good Is On The Great And Bad, This Makes Me Glad Cause I Believe Its Worth Dieing For The Oppertunity To Rest In Heaven i Feel For The Kids That Felt Death At Seven Kids Walkin Appearin As Clones, With No Homes One Sin Away From Bein Kept From Heaven So I Say No Matter The Drama In Your Day Dont Try To Get Away Face It Like A Man Just Be Yourself And If Needed Ask For Help be Like Me I Just Be Me I Never Fake Who I Am "Together" Its Humoris How You Never See Them Fallin But They Alwas Appear On The Ground Never Makin A Sound But Still There Alwas There This day to day change but yet always appears to be the same... This never fails to perplex me in the fullest, and will be forever scared to my brain.. One Said Do Whats Right The Other Said Do What You Want Who's Stopin You And All These Completly Oppisite Lifes Have Been Caught In A Drop Of Dew Dew Drops
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12-02-05, 11:16 PM
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IP: F96F DC9E
Dont Hate And Say My Lines Are Stretched Cause I Got Hella Multis Witch Make It Flow Good Still
Yes I Know What Im Doin Here
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12-03-05, 12:17 AM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 8CE0 530F
Dont sway man..let the voters base there opinions
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12-03-05, 02:06 AM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: 3211 9052
Guess i'm first.
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Man. Dope verse. of the three other verse's, I felt your's had the most twist to it, the best flow and was easily the dopest. Excellant vocab and multies. Really helped you two out. Quote:
Firstly, I didnt care for your flow. The lack of punctuation really sucked and made the read less intriguing. However you did have a nice concept and well thought out piece all together. Overall, you two dropped well, nicely done.  Quote:
Both your verse were long, which forces you to come harder in order to keep the dynamic flow and scheme on point. You didnt do a bad job of it. I didnt care for the lack of punctuation and felt you had a few spots where you could have thrown a conjunction in there to make the line come across more... finished. Your concept wasnt really anything mind boggling, but it wasnt bad. Nice multies. Nice job man. Quote:
Your flow was on point, however your lack of punctuation made it hard to read. Nice use of multies. Your concept would have sucked had you two not medled it together so well. As it stands though, I think im feelin' the other drop more. :| Quote:
Loved this little ending, nice ass flow and perfect ending to the piece. Overall, I think you guys both came hard, they just came a little better. LE won this for his team in my eyes. VOTE: LE & GK
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Blow It - Topical -=Respect List=-
Crhyme Sindicate  The unexamined life is not worth living.
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12-03-05, 02:16 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: D15A 9E3F
Leaf peddles bent down overweighted by dozens of water drops...
Appears as resemblance of past showers, but no moisture to be found on street tops... This line stood out most in fathom this and devins verse There concept to the topic was very original and I felt there emotion the entire way thru. They have many good concepts intertwined thru there entire peice. Emotion comes thick from both of you and vocab is alot better than your oposition. All of a sudden Im standing at my grave, not able to be seen... Tears are everywhere...I wake up, and it was only a dream... this bar stood out the most in LE and gkillaz verse. I feel they done very well working together with how they would write there verses. One ending with waking up the other starting with waking up. But there emotion lacked and therer originality with the topic is bland. The only way they used the topic was stating a bar about dew drops. Content in this peice isnt solid, and its not a very insightfull drop. No hate,just yeah. Vote Devin and Fathom this. |
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12-03-05, 12:56 PM
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All these Dead Presidents
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IP: 20E8 620D
thnx for honest votes.. uppin this... 1-1..
i'll be voting l8r after work.... i'm on my lunch break... so, its hard for me to get a good critique written in 5 minutes... so i shall catch ya'll later~~
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12-03-05, 01:29 PM
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L.E
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IP: DB16 D9CD
Word...good battle.
1-1...up... |
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