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10-15-06, 02:24 PM | #1 | |||||
Human Crack in The Flesh.
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Here's Another One
IP: 0992 DDA2
You'll get tossed like salad... Smashed with a mallet Slap bread across your face, boy... Have switched to a sandwich Have you slit...you won't manage Get you slit...then you'll panic Sonic underground... Beat you down, Like I'm Manic... Beat you down to the ground Rodney King'n it...(Now!) Rodney King in the town... Poppin the thing twice on... At tha cheeks in you clowns...shit Look into my eyes...See an evil surprise A disease lurking quick... to seek your demise A Red beast hurting... to feast til' you die SAW in the flesh... I'm Feeding off your cries... So scream Now, believe Now Like your watching Scream 3 the movie, And you can't breathe Now... Don't get slumped, or pumped... Then get dumped in the stream now... C'z down to them niggas... Who believe in The B'z Hounds... I'm Evil...Fuck people... They Knocked down our towers... But We Came back...like the El NiƱo Fuck a Genocide Sequel... NY City in house... Julius Erving to the People... Yeah, I kinda Fucked up at the last part, But Im looking for feed back...
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10-15-06, 02:25 PM | #2 | |||||
Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: 0992 DDA2
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=3092480
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03-19-07, 10:15 PM | #3 | |||||||
Under Oath
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IP: 5715 85AE
Booooooooooooooooooooo
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03-19-07, 10:45 PM | #4 | |||||
Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: BF46 0223
Fuck up! I wrote dat like last year.
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03-19-07, 11:16 PM | #5 | |||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 386A 9C28
wack son.................................
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03-20-07, 06:13 PM | #6 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 81E7 DBC2
i aint tryin to hate but aint really feelin it. i got the flow in the beginning n it was comin off hard, but then hit a down fall
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03-24-07, 10:38 AM | #7 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: ABEE BDCE
Haha, I read through it, n' in my mind it flowed tight as hell. Maybe your all just too close minded to free flow.
I personally loved it, good shit.
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03-26-07, 08:23 PM | #8 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 09BF CB64
It Got Kinda Boring Reading That... Obviously The Buzz Wasnt As Obvious As How U Had It Goin Down Urself... Which Is Where U Wana Get Audio In Play... In A Text Piece I Like To See Sum Complex Word Usage Rather Than Single Sylaable Words To Give It An Aesthetic Effect....... U Might Wana Think About How A Text Flow And Audio Flow Differ.... Find Ya Strengths Then Work On Em... All In All It Just Wasnt Delievered On The Scale That Ur Minds Eye Percieves It On To Other People... Keep Spittin Tho
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03-27-07, 02:50 PM | #9 | |||||
Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: 59E9 AFF2
YO FUCK GUY I POSTED THIS SHIT DOWN LIKE LAST YEAR WHY THE FUCK YOU UPPIN UP OLD THREADS? I DON'T TEXT LIKE THIS NO MORE. THIS WAS FROM MY HERB DAYS WHEN I WAS SL.VALENTINO so your FEEDBACK MEANS SHIT.
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04-16-07, 05:29 AM | #10 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 2318 1E51
sorry bro but shit was lame, couldnt even follow your rymes they were so scrambled. keep tryin though for sure.
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04-27-07, 12:32 AM | #11 | ||||
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IP: 0825 899A
Ah..I got this dude, for you bein new when you wrote this it was decent, it flowed alrite,..nothin really great but it wasn't wack either, no dis respect liek ^those faggots
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