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Old 12-22-04, 12:03 AM   #1
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Check Ins Must Be In By Friday Or Your Topic Wont Be Given...
If Check Ins Are In Then You Will Be Given A topic To Write About...
Poems Then Must Be In By Sunday
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TOPIC: lurking in the shadows
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Old 12-22-04, 05:52 AM   #2
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Old 12-23-04, 01:46 AM   #3
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Old 12-24-04, 11:21 PM   #4
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Lifes a mess, everythings passing me by
people often ask me why it is that i cry
at night and why am i filled with pain
sun never shines, the sky always rains
on top of me as i pass through the day
waiting for the end to come and take me away
i can see death lurking at every corner i pass
im so affraid, it feels like shards of glass
penetrating deep into my soul as the days progress
heaveyness and weight always on my chest
death is always on my tail and i can see it even in the light
no one understands why im filled with utter fright
ive lost the fight and no one knows how i feel
this is so overwelming i cant belive its so real
every meal could be my last and i dont know
what to do at all or even where to go
tomorrow is guaranteed to no one this is true
but when death lerks in the shadows commin for you
all you will know is the fright that it comes with
cause this is real and is no ultimate myth
so many things can be in the shadows you pass
but only one will eventualy cross everyones path
and that is the reaper, the bringer of the end
the one who knows where your soul to send
so be warry of the shadows and the darkness that be
for eventualy your time will arive and you to will see
 
Old 12-27-04, 02:53 AM   #5
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Figures flicker off alley ways, devious shapes move
Hideous pictures, peering from caverns and grooves
Lonely insecuritys walk cautiosly down dark streets
Eyes staring at the ground, briskly moving the feet
Stereotypical neighborhood, grafitti on the walls
With gangs prowling after hours, behind hidden falls
Homeless light fires, in trashcans to hold in warmth
Police sirens in the distance, provide calming of sorts
Hoardes a mice scamper, paws echo of the pavement
Screeches from car tires, hit and run for amazement
Shattered glass on the ground, spider cracks the panes
Bullets change directions, disillusioned with their aim
Water leaks from buildings, discoloring their surfaces
Forming puddles of rust on pictures of perfectness
Rap music from boomboxes trembles the heart
Vibrations slowly tear, natural rationality apart
A home to false impressions, with everything to lose
Type of scenes you see, so often depicted on the news
As this lonely neighborhood, gloomy as the gallows
Fear and dangerous stereotypes, lurking in the shadows
 
Old 12-28-04, 05:29 PM   #6
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Vote: lyric

Lyric
-vocab on pint
-structure on point
-best topic coverage out of all poems ive looked @ so far
-great imagery continously
-no emotion, try and create this or put some in
-8.5/10

WickedClown
-tight poem
-didnt cover topic that much
-dnt worry as much bout rhyming u can sacrifice it for imagery and flow
-emotion was there
-7/10
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Old 12-28-04, 05:34 PM   #7
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dam I loved lyrics poetry,
I think his flow of his poem was better no affense.
I think hi structure was better, and also his opener-closure was good
his imagry was execellent and last but not less his poem flowed better to me. VOTE LYRIC
 
Old 12-29-04, 09:26 PM   #8
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lyric wins 2-0.
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