What did I do wrong in this battle vs. token

My verse
Another wannabe exec., didnt I just merk one of ya,
"Sphered" his ass, now another faggot to get rid of
knock ya over, only"croak", ur "toad" ass can't get up,
ur "agency" is "overrated", go perfect wit "guerillaz"
first 3 letters in ur name r fukked up n gay, aint "TOK",
it's like foreman to Joe, deliverin ya a big, nice, "TKO"
In ur ata picture, the first letters are a "T" and an "O",
steal my towns initals bitch, wish u were from Toronto
but ur not, couldnt spit "high" shit even if you "toked",
just a big joke, givin more "hits" than an "Evolve" post
Now I can boast, I beat U, go tell the rest of the execs
and heres a lil penny for ur verse bitch...keep the rest


His Verse
Toke will fuck up your style... And leave your bars laid
Only way your punch will leave me red Is kind made by kool-aid
With wit that slow.. Even your nose comes out in last
Your punches are weak. .
. .I stepped out on a limb and put your wrist in a cast
I'ma daze you and I'll Have you poppin those pills
Bring new meaning to pump up the volume. .
. .Said you wanted to hang so I gave you the chills
You drove to this battle.. Just to get some acceleration
When the mods saw you were battling. . they noted special occasion
Token will ignite your rec... Just to give you rec-ignition
You just keep ending back to the start.. like subtracting addition



Like what did I do wrong here, I think I really diss him with the insane amount of personals in the verse, I dun see whats wrong with mine, like...I dun get it...can sumbody help me out plz

he more well known on this site, an peeps dont like to admit it, but when u see some one u seen before, against a newb, the votes usually goes one way.

he was jus wittier than you, in places

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/\ only people that dickride vote would say that

T-west his verse was better more wit less played more wordplay
dont worry though you put up a good fight

i agree with emerge.. you'll get there inventualy. t-west

keep trying

good luck

Actually, I agree wit 007. Try doing a lot of open mics to show people what u can do. Then hit the battles.

Actually Double-O-Seven Partly Had Answered Your Qestion.But I Read Your Verse Over, & I Coulden't Figure Out When Your Lines/Bars Had Ended.So That Could Of Threw You Off In Your Verse.Plus You Diden't Have Too Many Multis In There So That All Threw You Off.Plus He Just Had Better Punches Then You Did.But Keep Elevating,You'll Win One..Eventually
-Uno

You Need Punches.

Another wannabe exec., didnt I just merk one of ya,
"Sphered" his ass, now another faggot to get rid of
No Punch

knock ya over, only"croak", ur "toad" ass can't get up,
ur "agency" is "overrated", go perfect wit "guerillaz"
No Punch

first 3 letters in ur name r fukked up n gay, aint "TOK",
it's like foreman to Joe, deliverin ya a big, nice, "TKO"
Hmmm...Attempt

In ur ata picture, the first letters are a "T" and an "O",
steal my towns initals bitch, wish u were from Toronto
Punch?

but ur not, couldnt spit "high" shit even if you "toked",
just a big joke, givin more "hits" than an "Evolve" post
What?

Now I can boast, I beat U, go tell the rest of the execs
and heres a lil penny for ur verse bitch...keep the rest
Could Have Flipped It Better

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this site is all about dick ryding...u wont elevate here...

they judge by post count

nut agreed with NLit- u need punches and wordplay

just keep elevatin ya will get there sooner or later

what everyone has said so far should be taken iton consideration..
although his verse was better..yours wasnt that bad..
but look at NLitends breakdown..u lacked punches..
fuck multis..you dont need'em if thats not your style..
all you need is flow..structure..and original punches..
be creative as possible...

vets do get more attention on this site..but they also recognize talent...i dont think u got dickrode hear..cuz if token would have dropped halfass..a real vet would have let him know he dropped half ass and gave you the props you deserve at the same time..

go to LLL and read the battle there... try to see what it is that real vets are looking for in a verse..not saying that i am a vet..but i do notice and give props to those that drop decent verses..

just keep battlin and read verses from the top heads on the site..its worth the time...

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Some people win, and everyone will loose in due time...
Just keep elevating, thats all I can suggest. Im not the best, and I will never claim it. But I do know that much... LOL ...

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T west, U dominated the flow... But the other guys had some fantastic punches and read more easily... U had some aiight wordplay, but i kinda thought that croak = toad line wasn't that good......


Everyone loses though......

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