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Old 03-13-05, 12:43 PM   #1
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E.C Vs. ~Babylon~

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This Is The First Round So Records Will Not Be at stake.
But if you no show you will have your post cut in half.
You Must Vote in 2 other battles after you post yours or you will be DQ’d and will have your post cut in half.


Check In’s Due Before Tuesday March 15
Verses Due Before Thursday March 17
First to 3 Votes Win’s..
2-0 = KO
Remember, everything is in Pacific Time.
If you do not know what that is then too bad.


Topic:New Life
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Old 03-13-05, 02:38 PM   #2
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check in now and 30 linex max...30 linex max...30 linex max...
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Old 03-13-05, 03:07 PM   #3
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ight lol... put me up against the best topical head on our crew... thanks a bunch

checkin in... g'luck
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Old 03-15-05, 01:10 AM   #4
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oh sorry didnt know this was up....is it too late to check in.......wel n e wayz CHECK
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Old 03-15-05, 09:42 AM   #5
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nah u still made it.
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Old 03-16-05, 12:42 PM   #6
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...New life...

A new era, a new life, the second generation,
my first step, take a pace, and then ill be racin,
just words of scripts, minds full of pollution,
we grow from propaganda, negative evolution,
we've hurt when we don't bleed,
learn when we don't read,
and be blinded when we dont see,
the truth of the lies we kept,
for those who seek a priest to confess,
god is thee but who do we address,
a rebirth to meet the scandles who have lied,
jacked and smacked, blead till they died,
but thats the new life we live, but some of us miss it,
but thats the life u should try and avoid to visit,
but i pray to be born, so ill never be hated,
live like a soldier... die and be cremated,
but let me be holy at the place of my birth,
god bless my mother who brought me the the earth
and let me be better... i confess, lifes a test,
but let me pass the the heavenly place of rest,
and live happy, never fear or stress,
or be born to be either trapped or depressed,
i put my life in letters, my blood in the ink of my pen,
so when i write rhymes, i thnak the lord for being born again,
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Old 03-16-05, 11:05 PM   #7
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~My life is over~

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Life is wonderful i live good with a wife so amazing
even when i say things, shes by my side, and staying
I love her heart, her tone, and even the way she screams
seams, we joined together for a family but in alternate means
but now I just lost my job, and found out she was pregnate
life changes in seconds, being taught new lessons
so whats the message, new life brings new troubles
a crude struggle, my lifes a lie, just a misconstrude huslte
now its the hospitle, doctor visits, were they watch her liver
ovalrie infection, cried through my soul, i watched he shiver

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~Hardships~

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now the house is full of aggression, non needed stressin
tired of guessin, what shes mad at, so i dont even mention
the possesion, she puts me in, but she can see its hard
some times i feal like leaving, and given my regards
but whats the point, to prove i'm less of a man
she acts like a pest i cant stand, shes stressed and i understand
so I dont give her the temptation, of yelling, and angry pacin
its the state shes in, in need of an imidiate vacation
mourning sickness, she building up tention, and boring me with it
she makes jokes about us and its corny with quick wit

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~New beginings~

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I'm running late, just got the call, shes ready to go
called my father and hes makin jokes like, "shes ready to blow!"
I walk in my hearts pounding, cant speak but i start sounding
like a broken record, askin if shes alright, but its hard pronouncing
tounges tied, and my spirits on another level, but why i wonder
could it be that my baby means more, time to stop being a runner
askin the nurse hows the baby, and is it a boy or a gurl
she says its female, my lil' pearl, and i will give her the world
I see her face, and i'm fealin so spitiual, its a myrical
saying that a baby brings new life, is something more than just literal

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~The End~
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Old 03-16-05, 11:15 PM   #8
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E.C- Alright not bad for your first topical battle. Ok you had some good flow going here. Imaginary was ok need to elevate on that, you have to have a picture in your mind while you reading. Emotion didn't feel any at all, well maybe i did, but like a "tip" of emotion came out of your verse. But you had good flow, keep doing it you'll elevate. Upp your vocab a little too, words was basic in your verse.


Bablon- Hmm, nice flow mane. Emotion was good not your best but good i felted the narrator feelings in each paragraph goes on. Imaginary was good awsome, i could picture in my head wat's going on between the man and the women wat's the problem and shit. Vocab was good nice using words.


Overall=This battle was ok, like one-side kinda. E.C i felt like no emotion from your verse. Imaginary was ok, i couldnt picture in my head what's going on but without emotion it made your verse boring to read. Bablon ok nice emotion and imaginary, felted the narrator feelings throughout your whole verse. Imaginary was good i could picture in my head as i read it. So my vote goes to bablon, He came more creative and Alot more emotion than E.C

V/bablon
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Old 03-16-05, 11:44 PM   #9
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EC- Was too simple for me and was not in depth at all. You need to learn to use more emotion and try to really dive into the topic. It was alright, but you need to elevate a bit... Hard opponent thought.

Babylon- I liked the layout, and you ran pretty well with the topic... The emotion was there and was explained well throughout. I feel like you fell of here and there with some forced things, but it was still good.

The battle was alright, it looked like EC is new to topicals? No hate, just observing... Babylon took this with his emotion, layout and how well he wrote to the topic.


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Old 03-16-05, 11:49 PM   #10
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babylon wins be KO..

Battle closed..

P.S... Don't you wish that real front line/ EFL battles closed as fast as this
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