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Old 08-27-04, 01:29 PM   #1
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people live they're lives with hapiness and prosperity
but the tides of lives do not give everyone easy, so sparingly
some people must give all just to gain what is needed
they might have might and an igenius mind, soulfully seeded
but the heart of man, the fire that burn just to survive
in a world where sooner or later eveything just dies
is the only thing from keeping an idiot off the block
end up a contender of life, he might be at the top
because everthing falls, and they aint no point in crying
because if your goals a percived you'll be smilling dying

a lil lazy but just rate it
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Old 08-27-04, 09:45 PM   #2
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Old 08-28-04, 01:16 AM   #3
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it lacked the honesty and emotion , but otherwise i thought it was good, i should be able to feel the feelings of the author, but i didnt really, but otherwise i'll rate it 5 its average but nothing to special peace

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Old 08-28-04, 02:48 AM   #4
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yo we beefin in all but i gotta say you a betta poem writer than me peace out homie...
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Old 08-28-04, 05:56 PM   #5
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yeah that was good and he is better than me 2 lol...
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