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Old 05-08-07, 01:44 PM   #1
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straight RAW.....

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the led shot i'll make ya knees buckle
toss'in dirt on my name.... i'll have dirt toss on ya body with a shovle....
why try to fight when i dont use knuckles
i'll click clack pap and let the doc put you back like a puzzle...
i never ask for a rumble i let the brace knucklez leave ya ass pumble
for quick cash i'll smash ya fam.. till they trip to a cuffin like funeral stumble....
i got ski mask, with twin turbo vipers incase i have to feel fast
and speed past the bridge police non-stop like a ez-pass....
you dont want bullets to fly out and touch you
got'em feeling molested, i confess kid... after the clip done i'll snuff you....
why try to see me... only to get left stager ya'll?
after the bullets done, i'll toss the magazin at'em like i hated the catalog....
i guess you guys is all fools, bullets i'll dive in ya chest like a pool
so like plastic zip i'll Bag ya Body like left ova food ....
i guess you relize im rude plus im not giving a fuck
about to treat'em like duck tape and stickem up ....
i never sip my cup.. got'em feeling my verse like hes girl tits and stuff
the piff is puff, he slip hes luck... got ya girl confess'in she cant get enuff ....
forget that duck, and get back to the corner store
cuz these guys i'll get drop quick like the draws on whores....mother fuckah...


verse 2...

ya faggets thought it was ova but im just getting started
the knife rip a hole in ya chest, an toss ya orgens in the freeza if ya want to be COLD HEARTED
if you cant handle the beef dont start it, i got a few good men with aim an i dont mean the messenger
no need to be stress'in ya, if ya niggas wanna live forever i'll bring death to ya
and crash ya frame into a brick like a stunt dummy
and if ya wanna bite my style...then these bars i'll give that you want from me
i'll have ya moms wrap'ed up sorda like a mummy
cuz the bitch give out so much head... im serprize she aint turn to a dummy
im rolling throu ina Whip ya cant figuer out where its made from.. HOLLA
and the only thing u'll FOLD is ya fucking COLLAR
OPEN YA MOUTH i got something for you to swalla
look MAN you a fake hustler's... cuz the only good line is from ya BARBER
why bother?.. and dont try to run... can do a mile a min... well these bullets go farther
dont even invold ya crack head father... cuz the only ROCK ya HELD is when ya COPed THE S.DOT.CATER....... MOTHER FUCKAH....


LETS GO....


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Old 05-12-07, 10:08 AM   #2
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haha damn nice...liked the punches alot....alot of hard lines there....keep em coming ~1~
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Old 05-15-07, 02:20 PM   #3
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Nice Punchlines homie...... you make me wanna spit em but I'll save em for tha battles..... even tho nobody votes on em but anyways....... nice drop... good read..... It's been a week but I'm back and still here.... get at me man
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Old 06-04-07, 03:00 PM   #4
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man im not really a fan of the fake gangster shit .... come more creative and stop with that fake nonsense
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Old 06-04-07, 03:20 PM   #5
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it aint that creative but maybe it wasn't meant to be creative, maybe it was meant to just be some good 'ol hardcore punchline rapping, and thats what it was. good job man. long as you still can be creative (which i know that'chu are) than its all good.
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Old 06-04-07, 03:33 PM   #6
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well by creative...i also mean...structured better... flow better..not choppy and weak.
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Old 06-10-07, 05:15 PM   #7
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u got some good metaphores in this verse, had a nice flow 2 it aswell man, i was feelin the second verse more, cus it wasnt like 2 bars then 2 bars, it felt like 1 big line which jus kept goin and goin, it was a good read and u outdone urself here man, check out my drop called fameass
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