i say that i'm like the whole industry wrapped in one cuz of this,

i'm don cardyac, raps bleesin' in action
gotlines PAST ya'll minds,i'll have ya'll MEMORY lapsin'
no christmas so ya'll ain't gettin' me (w)rappin'
cuz if i had pants with a suit'chall couldn't picture me slackin'
when i'm speakin' it expands your mind
my grind needs width to stand but you cant widthstand my grind
was DRIVIN' 'em crazy so long till i had to RIDE
plus i'm a boss so like dinero this is analyzed (analyze this)
for potential i'm showin' SIGnS like PANDEMIMES
a WONDER but brought the HEAT so that my BREAD could RISE
and you can tell that i
have a MIND that i cant HANDLE but just know, i HANDLES MINE
see i'm HOOD like J be(jhood), proud like james B.(brown/be)
but when i'm UNPLUGGED i get ENCORED like JAY-Z
so maybe i'm the JAY of DC or BIG L of it
i know that PUN, BIG, and L's gotta love it
that finally a bruva from the D dot C
inspires like P.A.C. and does it EASY as E
and i owe it to those who belived in me
to who fronted on me and lookin' like they want somethin' from me
HATE ME OR LOVE ME, but i got DREAMS to PUT'CHU ON THE GAME(the game)
i'm a SOUL SURVIVIN', TRAP STARIN', GO-GETTER that BANGS
AND THEN WHAT(jeezy), i'd do to get 'em all goin'
is during MIC CHECKS, i'd WHISTLE MY SONG
OH YES(juelz), i pursued rhymin'to adventually go DIAMOND anyway
cuz NOTHINS EVER PROMISED TOMORROW TODAY
it was a SLOW DRIVE(kanye) to the TOP OF MY GAME
so i LEANED AND ROCKED(DFB) bammas frames who wasn't thinkin' the same
and even when your blind you gotta watch that
cuz WHAT'CHU KNOW ABOUT a KING comin' to push ya TOP BACK(ti)
so testin'me? you don't really wanna do that cuz, mayne
i'm a MONEY MAKER who'll RUN AWAY your LOVE(luda) for the game STAMP.

and trust me there is more creative genius to come from me so get familiar.

feedback please.......

READ THE RULES TILL THEN ITS CLOSED

that was nice, alot of word-play creative rittens well layd-out, no real punches or noting but decent flow and im looking forward to seening more work from you, you have a nice style kid keep it up dunny...

thankx. i'm really a punchline rapper ironicly but this was to express my diversity. cuz i usually just do battles . but my other post "i should be ur fav. rapper" has more punchlines in them. i'm tryna troubleshoot any flaws so i'm greatful for the feedback,

feedback please...

drop some feed back in my open mic
its called: straight RAW...