Just started writing back in May, and this is one of my first.


I sit back, reminiscing on them hardship days...
Which made me consider hustling in the first place...
Couldnt picture blowin up, growin up in the PJ's...
Future cloudy like seattle skies, a struggle everyday...
Bein broke was the last thing I had on my mind...
Until I had deeper hunger pains than a breadline...
Parents was unemployed and I still couldnt get hired...
Unemployment checks didnt pay as much as we desired...
Couldnt get the throwbacks or the sneakers i wanted...
Had to put the gear on hold when the bills were confronted...
My bad grades and decisions kept college out of the question..
Out of my league, couldnt go on to higher education...
Now Im under pressure, in a hole, back against the wall...
but I refuse to let the streets bring my downfall...
I gotta do whatever It takes to make a quick buck...
Becuase I not the type of nucca that depends on luck...

[Hook]

Lifestyle of a hustla is the only route i can go...
Havin hustle dreams of makin money, gettin that dough...
Out of school with no job and no where else to turn to...
Gotta provide for me and my fam anyway i have to...
I always dreamt of bein successful and makin money...
Cuz im in a world where cash rules everything around me...
Nuccas will do anything to have that green in they hand...
Get rich or die tryin, all part of a hustla's plan...



That was years ago, now im in the game hustling raw...
Gettin that dought, even if my way is against the law...
Im on my grind now, money aint a problem no more...
Have over 20 G's everytime i walk in the door...
Few months on the strip and Im already a hustle king...
Me and the fiends developed A Baltimore Love Thing...
Makin money that got my stacks growin larger everyday...
And my name spreading through the hood like GTA...
But as my pockets swelled up, more nuccas envied me...
So I keep the 9 tucked in case them nuccas got risky...
All this jealously, they wanna pull me down like gravity...
Becuase i made my money dreams into a reality...
Try to dime me out to the feds or threaten to pop me...
Hatin on me cause Im ridin with sprees on my GT...
This game can take your life If you dont play your cards right...
You can get killed or end up gettin twenty five to life...

[Hook x2]


Link: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2197982

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cmon yall, can i get some feed

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Poor rhymes and cliche. Wordplay didn't work. Try usin a topic that hasnt been used thousands of times and use more multis and complex rhymes. Lyrically it was disgusting and content wise it reeked. Also ur flow is kinda off in some parts but that wernt 2 much of a problam.

But hey hoo cares wat I think. Keep it up and ull get betta.

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^^WOW...i really hope that you didnt just say this open mic was bad...and then put those lyrics in your sig?

anyway antm@c...feeds comin slow uh?this was actually good if you only started writing in may.The structure was pretty much perfect,i agree the concept was kinda played,but never the less you did it well.Try adding a lil wordplay in there and try using better vocab.But you'll naturally pick that up as you write more stuff.overall to say you only started in may,you got alot of potential.Keep droppin stuff on here and you will get some feedback that will help,you just gotta keep askin for feed.Theres some excellent topical heads on the site which you can learn from.So keep droppin homie,good piece.wun

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^^^nice bitchin. Least my life dosn't revolve around rap forums "What is life?!?!... Open Mic" lol. I was just puttin across my opinion thats wat postin ur shit up is all about. Y tell him hes writin gud shit wen he aint? False feedback. Tell ppl strate and they will lern. At least I wern't a cunt about it.

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You know the rappers these days that snap then breeze ways//
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before someone engraves a scar on your inflated arse//

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Iight thanks 4 the feed, uppin

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yea nice man more like a song but thats aight i felt the concept u made this piece is very good man nice vocab usage nice flow and structure and i really like the idea of a hustla's dream it would be way better if it just didnt have a hook cuz it can be just felt straight through wit out it and if u have hurrd that new song by sunN.Y. its called" Soul of a hustler" and its just straight spittin so this song shuld be like that well good job on this man keep up the good work ok

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