Nigga Please Piece:

Mental mishaps life taking mismatch now so lonely
Astonishing car crash made her life past god owes me
Now im lonley not feeling cozy missing my loved one
Pausing in this moment her life came to enclosement im her son
Mother no longer living no longer giving tears roll from my eyes
I look to the sky's for the reason why for my mothers demise
Life is getting hectic i just cant except it she wont rest in peace
She deserved this the least Pain was increased now shes deceased
No answer for the killer a homocidal thriller who could this man be
Why would they kill or make her ill a women that is so sweet
Emptyness in the mind this man should be confined i lost my love
Tears running from my cheek im feeling weak she watches from above
Stop to reminisce reliving our last kiss before i went to bed
I turn to sigh WHO IS THE GUY that made my mother dead
My anger is flaring my patience is wearing he must be executed
At the trial dad adresses hes the one he confesses now my minds polluted
Parents gone I guess life goes on I shall remember what he did
Now im on my own his cover was blown i walk the streets but im only a kid
2Fast2Furious:
One faithful night it was all taken away,
I was took back, and put back into place.
I don’t know how, still don’t know why
But only thing worthwhile I can do is sit alone and cry.
Gone is your smile, your laugh, your tears,
The voice I knew for many long exciting years.
Thinking back now, I remember how I took things for granted
but now I wish I could show you; no more greetings,
Good-byes, no hugs, infinite cries I try to bring you back
Wish you hadn’t gone that night, but only God knows the answer to that.
They played your favorite song you know?
I heard your name over the radio,
So young, so full of life, you wouldn’t believe who showed up to say goodbyes.
Bro and Sis were there, I stood right near them as I blocked teary stares
Everyone wanting the same thing, the split second before our lives all changed.
Everything rearranged wow, life’s so different.
Going on living without you will be a life not worth living.

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No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

structures were completely fucked lyrics were basic i mean coulda thrown some wordplay in.. topic was aiight overall you both need some improvement in various areas keep droppin...1

uppin to the top.....lets go

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Sig Provided by: Christianite

3 nails + 1 cross = 4given
No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

uppin 4 some feed

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Sig Provided by: Christianite

3 nails + 1 cross = 4given
No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

Yo man/girl, this piece was very emotional ya structure was very of but other than this it was a good concept fellt the emotion felt niggaplease had a stronger verse due to better vocab and multis his story was more intact....but 2 furious felt ur verse also very emotional just up on ur structure and ull be tight no doubt keep it up 8/10

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thanks fo real, ya i felt nigga too, lol. But uppin!

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3 nails + 1 cross = 4given
No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

this was good, as they said structure needs work, but other than that it was pretty good, vocab was decent on both parts, felt both parts equally, flow was good, nice use of emotion on both parts, keep it up you two

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^thanks man appreciate it.....now lets get ta given more feedback guy/girls!!

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uppin^.................

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thanks man appreciate x100....keep it flowin in :thumup:

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