This is not a freepost...

Either was my last post, I was simply saying I vote for Elementality, his verse was better...if you want me to explain it right now I will...

He had way better imagery, emotion, vocabulary, everything...his story line was great...hells fire was a bunch of short sentences that rhymed...and any gr.3 could have thought of the concept....Elementalitys verse was just better...

V/Elementality...

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Elementality: enjoyed reading your piece because you have a nice writing style in my opinion. I like how you portrayed the sun in those different scenes and how you let the story progress. Your vocabulary was at a high level and it gave something extra to your poem, the imagery was excellent due to your word choice. The emotion was nice as well, how you portrayed the sun as a being and how it made the person feel. I read it a few times to fully grasp everything you were saying, very nice poem!


Hells Fire: I enjoy how you set up this poem with the 2 similar structured lines all the time, the imagery was great. I could really picture everything inside my mind and your emotion was strong, it portrayed the almighty sun versus the mortal human being and such, I really love your approach. The vocab was very good as well, I was scared that those similar lines would get repetitive after a while but that didn't happen, I was focussed throughout the whole thing. You really managed to bring out the concept of the cold so well, excellent piece!

Close battle and it's very hard to decide on this on but in the end my vote goes to Hells Fire, no hate whatsoever to Elementality because I enjoyed both drops! I just like the creative approach and emotion in Hells Fire's piece a bit more...

DQ

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vote/Elemntality

Both were decent drops...but I felt the way Element took the topic more, it just seemed to grasp me. I had to read Hellfire's a couple times cause I kinda just lost a little interest towards the end..but after reading again it was good. Hell's flowed alot smoother, due to the more even lines and the bit of rhyme scheme he had. But in a poem I look for thought, detail etc. and Element took it there.