i hang on to this peice, cuz its a part of me
i shoot blindly cuz i feel im drowning in a sea
of a pool of my own blood i can hardly breathe
i try so hard but its like a useless seige
but for me thats about all i can do
i struggle till my face turns blue
but i get no closer to you
but in my heart i want soo bad
to get my hands on you

you can run but you cant hide
your ass is now mine
ill be their just in time
to c you sit down and begin to dine
but ill be waitin there
but not with a 9
ill have you by the hair
with my HK in the air
the air is so thick
and full of tension it makes me sick
im not nervous but this trigger is so slick
ur like a bar of soap
i tried so long to find you
now i got you tied down with a rope
cuz its my mental note
of what you did to me
its pissin me off, i cant wait
to see ur brains all over ur plate
and ur wife and kids runnin
and freakin out
yet i come out gunnin
with an ak now
kids blown down, you say its personal now
its been personal kid
cuz you stole my crown
you stole the key to this city
and i was gunna get rich
cuz i can rhyme better than 50
that little bitch
just because you want to stand in this light
when teh light is lime,
leave me runnin from the light
xept its a life of crime
im a fuckin kill you

i hang on to this peice, cuz its a part of me
i shoot blindly cuz i feel im drowning in a sea
of a pool of my own blood i can hardly breathe
i try so hard but its like a useless seige
but for me thats about all i can do
i struggle till my face turns blue
but i get no closer to you
but in my heart i want soo bad
to get my hands on you

shots in the night wake me up
im covered in a pool of blood and guts
my girl is layin next me me
ur clip is empty, my babys cryin
only 10 month old and shes dyin
and what the hell did i do to you
and now ur gunna make me throw my life away
and bust this 2, bust my 8,
and bring out this guage
i no you want you money
ur not gunna c that buddy
cuz ur pay will come as payback
cuz you stabbed me in teh back
we were brothers yesterday, makes me sick
thanks dawg for frontin me this brick
ill pay you back next month
and thats how it started
i no life is tough, but not that tough
we slowly became enemies
i dont c how this all came to me
im sorry how shit goes down
but i try not to drown in sorrow
because tommorrow it will all be over
and ull be just like hova
retired

i hang on to this peice, cuz its a part of me
i shoot blindly cuz i feel im drowning in a sea
of a pool of my own blood i can hardly breathe
i try so hard but its like a useless seige
but for me thats about all i can do
i struggle till my face turns blue
but i get no closer to you
but in my heart i want soo bad
to get my hands on you

so learn this lesson kids drugs are bad
they make you sad, pissed off, and mad
they make you do anything for just a little sack
people will give you shit but if you dont pay them back
they come back after you and make sure you do
thats y you gotta stick you gotta stick to what you can afford
like glue, just snort it from a tube, and it makes a better you
shit like in this story happens every day
dont think not to you cuz someday it may
so just remember kids, dont grow to attached
you girlfriend, mother and kids are all expendable
and ur house may have you roof thatched
but ur rich when you have a guage, and its dependable

my story

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aiight piece...simple vocab......could have used some multis.....flow was alil off to me....but overall nice piece ..........6/10mics

Onez

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not too bad i give it a 6/10

anyone willing to go into detail, id really like to know what i need to improve on

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ur wordplay was kindergarden middle school shit up da vocab work on ur multies work on sum punches but over all u did pretty good 6/10 keep practicin holla back

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thanks, ill have to work on that