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Old 12-21-03, 06:32 PM   #1
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12 Months

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I know its short, but leave comments



In January, it's contrary,
Fedruary, is real scary,
then theres March, we stoppin hearts,
With April showers, im in power,
Then in May, We all gonna spray,
Next in June, We bringin doom,
In July, we make moms cry,
pickin August, takin orders,
in September we deliver,
take October, for Hangovers,
have November, Thankgiving Diner,
Kill December, we dismember

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Old 12-21-03, 07:56 PM   #2
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thought this could have been a good concept..but it was executed jus plain wak....why even post it.......
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Old 12-21-03, 07:58 PM   #3
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im not hatin or nothin but wat was tha point of this supposed 2 b jus askin
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Old 12-21-03, 08:15 PM   #4
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man...that was pure whack wether the idea was good or not.....you seriously need to elevate son...
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Old 12-21-03, 09:15 PM   #5
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elevate!
but lol at wat u said fo july
cuz I did make my momma cry in july
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Old 12-22-03, 11:32 AM   #6
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..I'm not feeling this piece at all..not hating on you but..this was very very 'Weak'...hopefully your next one is ALOT'-BETTER!
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Old 12-22-03, 11:58 AM   #7
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Uhhhhhhh.... It was plain boring. It seems like you didn't even try. This could have been great as a really long verse. It is an original idea, but you fucked it up.
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Old 12-22-03, 12:01 PM   #8
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Wow what the fuck was that weak
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Old 12-22-03, 01:13 PM   #9
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This wasnt all that good....You had a good concept but just didnt cover it as good as it could have been covered...there really isnt much to say about this besides elevate....but it will come to you...and keep at it.
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Old 12-22-03, 02:27 PM   #10
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you had a good concept but a weak flow, vocab, and length.


you need to seriously elevate on da real tip!!!!

go to whackness forum questions and answers, they'll help you if you aren't too whack!!!!!!!!!!!!

nice try though
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Old 12-22-03, 03:20 PM   #11
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^^^^
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needs to take a trip the emergency wack center
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Old 12-22-03, 03:53 PM   #12
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that was whack ya shit is low go kill ya self u suck
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