Beat: C.R.E.A.M

Day 1:
Wakin up like a normal day for a hustla
Get my gear on, cop my cash - and meet up wit a busta...
He didnt have the cash, but wanted to cop a D off my stash
So I thought fast, asked "you got sumfin I could cop?"
Told me from the top - he had a tight chain-on
But wouldnt hand it over, He didnt know i had a strap-on.
Tried robbin me, I was strugglin, started shovin
I stabbed him in the stomach, called him a "dumb-bitch"
And shot him 2 times, then later slanged 2 nicks and 3 dimes
Went home and slept wit an eye open...

Day 2:
I was still memberin the followin' day
Cats still clip hollowin the same way
They was startin to beef, cuz I bucked a guy on the street
So I told my homie Jose, he was Kingin
I thought back in the days my homie, was blingin
Then looked at him now, a pale peurtorican junkie
He wouldnt hesitate to snup me, from a dump of crack
He was a phene, and I supplied him
So I relied on him...
He fixed my problem, I knew he'd solve-him...
I slanged him a oz for a buck, he stuck then snupped me...

3 Weeks Later:
They released me from the hospital.
I walkd up to Jose, and pieced him, in front of whole-crew
Walked away, checked the stash, man, nigga stole-too
I was missin 10 rocks, my socks, and locks...
Murder was in my mind, teeth began to grind
And i went into a rage, *flips the page*
*Thinks*: Workin at BK for minmum wage, got into hustlin
Started gun touchin, now he tryin to rob me?
Nuh uh, im bout to kill this sorry bitch - for a fee
Walked up to his enemy, and made a deal - I wasnt gon kill fo free
His life was the seal, he bout to feel the pain off a blood stain....
Put a mask-on, loaded the chamber, and put my strap-on
Put my frankfurt in my pocket, walked up point blank
In front of the Cicero and Kedzie Bank, and pulled
Made sure I unloaded, his chest exploaded
I sure showed-him, shout "Rey(king) Killa", and broke..
As I write I start choke on the marijuna smoke...
I couldnt kill without bein sober...
I didnt sleep

2 Months:
Been a few since I wrote,every Deal I do its higher then a C-Note
So im proud of that, bout lotta niggas wnna be see me lay flat
So I hustled a Rock for a gat, and snubbed a baseball bat
Started to clip-hug, and trip-thugs up in there own mess
Stress - cuz i was the best hustla...
Till Kings put S.O.S on me, cuz i droped Jose.. R.I.P, my homie
They had the hit on my name, my fame was runnin'
My sonnin' caught up to me, and looks like I owed the fee
This time I cant run from the enemy, no friends were next-to-mee.
Its strange how I was on the top of it all
And I began to fall, now I lay in the boddom of the casket
They looked for my stash-to-smash-it, then peddle it
But it was deep in Jose's pocket, he kept it...

My only friend I rolled on - Now, they potrol on
And Exploaded on me, Made sure theyd' empty
And im 10 feet - and im never comin out...

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My people skills are way better then yours, nigga..

ill get my links up

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My people skills are way better then yours, nigga..

hmmm..rhyming must have been difficult...another story of a spick..another story of a murder..another story about sellin drugs...I've seen it all..even the diary idea is kinda of played..you get a c for effort..
6/10...peace out

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this was a good piece, had some good details and a good sence of style and structure, well done keep it up

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I think this was good in a sense, but too PAC-y...people still flowin or bitin styles. Needs more lyricism, but a bright fate tho..hopefully you can see where you need improvement-vocab and creativity. Keep droppin...

Could have been a bit more original. Although it flowed well and you had come potential filled concepts. So overall it wasn't too bad.. Although wasn't too good. It was good just not great.

Overall 6/10.

Keep at it.

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The Creation

shit was kool

It was okay. I kind of got bored at three weeks. Creative idea though.

i was felling that. your flow was nice and the concept was dope even if played out. nice lyrics too keep it up

yo son. that was an aight piece. flow was good, good idea, and vison, vocab could use some elevatin, but overall aight.
a 7.5/10.
peace.

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