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First Verse Here-Feed Back If Possible--Illest--Krytikal
IP:
I shine Line by Line, whether it's a pen or keyboard writtin my rhyme//
i dont spit in barz i spit in paralell lines// my flowz are 1nce in a lifetime,but it this was recorded yall would have your hands on rewind// sometimes i wonder if god likes life cauze i think he hates mine// sleepin wit cold chillz runnin down my spine, takin my loved ones away from me like i was bein robbed blind// sometimes i have thoughts of suicide runnin through my mind, cauze it seem's like life's movin on but im fallin behind// drivin down dead ends drunk crashin over stop signs, blood alchole level risin but my state of consciousness declines// 100's of parkin violation fines got me runnin into town hall wit 2 friends and 5 nines// creatin a bigger disaster and mess then them kids at columbine// i got nothin to hide, sadness fillz my home// king of the microphone, fuck a beat i'll freestyle to the dial tone// my sick keystyle' flowz might fracture your bones, cauze i have da illness disease in my chromosomes// i have the stamina of 10 men and i'll attack like a wolverine// it's only the Krytikal but im the sickest netcee you' ever seen// my shit should be illegal like sex to pre-teens// i'll ruin dreams, develope a marvelous rhyme scheme// defeatin me is like defeatin the mens' us basketball team// cant see me cauze i'll burn your eye's like chlorine// and have you fucked up like a kid drinkin straight liquir when he's only fourteen// my lyrics travel the globe and burn out your computer wires// shit so sick i'll have you usin a knife and writin parental advisory in your tires// fuck brittney spears so hard bitch'll have to retire// me get tired ? that's impossible like freddy krouger usin plyers// how long was this keystyle? i dont know i dont keep track// i dont have a stopwatch on the side of my computer timin me from the begining to end of my rap// that shit's wack, bitches sayin it took me like 5 minutes// but it was prewritten, and it only took you that long for it to be typed and finished// this isn't life this is the survival of the illest// Thanks 4 reading my first verse on the Rap Battle website, I'm 16 and looking for some feed back if you can. 1 |
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