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Old 01-04-04, 09:46 PM   #1
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Souldja Oath

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=101048
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=103848
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...997#post1049997

Look above and get ready to accept-ma-fate,
Got me standin like a man inna perfected-state,
You'll regret-mistakes which is something i neglect-ta-make,
Cause souldja's got more then what it takes to respect-a-fake,
Hands sweaty, my mothafuckin head wont let-me-focus,
All I can think about is mothafucka's that'll bet-we-hopeless,
But my mind got clearer listenin to my heavy-dopeness,
Mufucka's think they be glistenin but I already-wrote-this,
We aint just some wannabe rappers that-be-playin-games,
We just listen and end up dissin after we be happy-sayin-names,
Come at us n attack us and we demonstrate what u actually-lack,
Laughs and moans from diffrent tones as u gradually-rap,
It aint all bad-though, cause we attempt stoppin poverty,
Wit this fuckin mad-flow Im declinin anything they offer-me,
If this world was fair at all these men would have property,
Nothins fair tho cause only bitches wit RICHES win the lottery,
But we here ta change that wit the souldja brewery,
A new souldja everyday ta steal that bitches jewerly,


Check it out let me know what ya think
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Old 01-05-04, 05:38 AM   #2
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Old 01-05-04, 10:57 AM   #3
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since this is getting slept on ill reply for ya.... firstly i think ya focused to much on getting the multis in..and some seemed forced....the rest of it was pretty basic... need some good wordplay and complexity, ...but as a read it was ok...the flow was ok...not bad...pZ
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Old 01-05-04, 11:33 AM   #4
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thanks bro, I'll work on that shit next time
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Old 01-06-04, 03:47 AM   #5
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Yeah this was alright i thought......your structure in this was pretty good through out the piece.....your flow in this was ok, it fell off at some points but still good overall....your multies like Deva said some did seem forced, just work on that....and keep at it.
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Old 01-06-04, 09:11 AM   #6
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..a decent drop..few lines stood out..but..on the other hand I agree with thse two ^..you need to work on few areas..
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Old 01-06-04, 01:16 PM   #7
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thanks guys
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