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01-05-04, 05:41 PM | #1 | |||||||
New to RV
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Guesssss Whossssss Backkkkkk
IP: DC84 4CE0
Yall thought i was gone, and yall could have rap,
well im back, indian giver takin it back, ain't takin no crap, i was settin the trap, throw up, and still spitten better than yall cats, yall ass wack, and yall can have that, cuz if thats rap, shit, im quitin for a fact, i'll have to do my own thang, i've made my own game, started with change, and changed my whole name, after fame i remained the same nigga, just quicker to chug liquor, and spit at your lighter, burnin the flamin faggots, haters, and lyers, yall should retire, before yall start, yall bodies in my freeza, and its still to hot, never on top, stay at the bottom, all on my nuts, get'um Got'em Guesssss Whossssss Backkkkkk Word Perfect Viscocity A.T. |
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01-05-04, 08:33 PM | #2 | ||||
Over Weight
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IP: 4577 CD9A
No..go back away...
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Soft Focus Suicide Inc. RhymeVantage Def.Ill Ghost-Writers Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..
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01-06-04, 03:40 AM | #3 | ||||
Word.
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IP: 340D 8B8F
Yeah this was ok i thought.....it was simple though....your structure was ok, it needs some work though....try keeping your lines around the same length so its structured good and so it helps the flow out...try adding some multies to this as well...but keep at it.
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01-06-04, 09:13 AM | #4 | ||||
Banned: Spamming
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IP: C1DA C961
..^
^..LOL....what he said... |
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01-06-04, 02:14 PM | #5 | |||||||
1E
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
yeah i think this was too short,... oh and 'wow' ya back....lol... work on complexity, and vocab....
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01-06-04, 02:24 PM | #6 | ||||||
OriginIll
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IP: D79C 2834
Why Did You Come Back.?
I Didn't Even Know You Were Gone.? When Are You Leaving Again.? By the way.. this drop was garbage |
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