This is something in which displays my feelings at the moment. Basic flows of emotion are in this.



A secret eating away at your soul
Wanting to tell someone, but not being able to
It has to stay a secret or my life will be over
My friends will disown me and turn on me completely
My parents will hate me
Everyone will think different of me, even though that never seemed to matter
Wanting to change wut is to come
But not being able to without going against my word
Going against wut I totally believe in as a human being
So that secret ponders inside me
Seeping through all of the cracks and tearing it apart
Having no mercy
Just sitting and waiting for me to break
As the songs say my life was "stole" and "there goes my life"
A simple mistake that cost me my life as a girl
Everything is flipped now and I have to pay for my mistakes
I choose to pay for them by myself and walk down that path alone
Blocking everything out and walking my path and not looking back

Crying thinking of what I have done as a human
Crying and not being able to stop as if my eyes were rivers
A cold soul, yet a warm part that allows me to cry
I'm going solo for this one boys
Shaking, as for I realize wut I must do
I'm just a kid, but I'm a strong one
I got that from my daddy
My best friend in the world, whom I would die for in a second
However, I want to die now for wut I have done
That "crime" in which I have committed
That is wut you referred it to, a crime
You hurt me when you said those things to me
Those hurtful words that brought me down as low as I could possibly go
But you know what, I'm holding strong, because I have something to look forward to
My future, and what is to come
It will be painful, but I'll get through it


Hopefully........

It's ok.

Fuck them.

That was a damn good read from the beginning to the end. It doesn't elaborate much on the specific situation, but I can certainly feel all the painful emotions that you've written. That's something.

I think the flow of one line to the next was so perfect, I was halfway through with it before I realized it didn't rhyme. Go figure.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Thank you for the feedback. It is truely taken to heart. The situation is hidden for personal reasons, hence the secret. I'm glad you liked it Necro. That kind of feedback means a lot to me. Thank you both. Much luv.

As long as your putting your emotions down like you did now, you'll always be real in what you speak. I feel u. Its like your foreboding the inevitable and have made a crooked path straight to more pain in my understanding of this poem. Do and say what you think is right. Feelings are all that matter.

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nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol

none yall niggas wanna see me...