an audio verse im working on, to take to the studio, each member of the crew is doing a verse... jus wanting some feed,....

From the 1E district rolling streets like our blunts, from days to months
And months to years, and years to now, still standing proud
With voices loud, yes, unleash the fucking shroud… yes from the pit yakka territory
So inevitably were gonna be, were gonna see jus virtually any thing
We’re like telepathy… a remedy to British beats without defeat
And reign elite, to the colliery streetz, without deceit, just reppin real
Not incomplete… no we don’t compete, combine in rhyme
With deadly lines, yes unconfined still bringing sight to the fucking blind
I think you’ll find in time that the crime was decline, reppin 1 in our prime
Cos the yak is pak’ing punches, jus like justice, less corrupted
Backs are trusted, skillz erupted, so I say fuck it… and you,
But Refuse and get abused, prepare to lose, ill match ya moves in a battle
Let you chose, and then confuse with my lyrical abuse, shit, im on a fucking cruise
Im bemused with myself, and all the wealth that’s in my verses
I don’t rehearse this shit on purpose, I make you surplus… to requirements
Cos my environment is not a circus, no room for clowns… ya heard it?
So observe it and fucking learn it…

yo Dev diss was sick an it would prob flow real good
on audio, alot good movin wordz in diz one really
rhythmic, it was hot, stay up
peace

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nice man.. love to hear it in audio.

uppin.........thnx.....

yo dev, that woz some hot shit man. the flow was well constructed the mets were good. its nice to see some ill rappers from the Uk if ya know what i mean. keep it up.

This IMO will be inevitably sick in audio, to really experiance it in written, it is difficult but hearing it in audio will make it alot clearer. You have some dope vocab here, left room for breath control and shit...might look a little unstrucured, but it will be dope in audio form...

"Im bemused with myself, and all the wealth that’s in my verses
I don’t rehearse this shit on purpose, I make you surplus… to requirements
Cos my environment is not a circus, no room for clowns… ya heard it?
So observe it and fucking learn it…" - i could quote the whole verse cos it was ill, but that is one of the best....

sick dawg, as for a text piece 3/5 but would be alot more in audio.

thnx man, when ya know the beat it s better..... any more

sounds like this shit would go good with audio, nice lyrics and i can tell even without music it flows nice...i read it along with a freestyle beat and it went well....this was a good piece

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yo bro some sick shit like LA said alot of rythmic words and lines in this piece and I know for a fact this would flow nicely on audio but ya had some really good wordplay in here very good job on that, multi's and vocab were plentiful to nice shit. keep up bro. peace.

yo man peep my collab with Yaz and some feedback would be muchly appreciated, it's called "Stories of Old" thanx in advance bro.

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..Dev..never fails to amaze me..one of the best open mic'ers around..

Yeah i agree this was real nice here man....it should sound good in audio i think....it flowed nicely i thought, very smooth....had some nice multies in there, you stayed consistant with that.....nice vocab like always....overall a real nice drop man....keep at it.