This goes out to you/but its part two/
A reworked piece, dedicated to ma crew/
A bitch ass jerk, annihilated, had no clue/
A peace shoutout to 80shotzz and Credz/
Nuff respect to they hip hop headz/
One luv ja bless from the bottom o ma dreadz/
I got this shit locked like motherfukin fed’z/
We thoroughbred’z/ The words I said/
mc’s retread/armed like a chip lead/
crumble mc’s like cheap bread/
leave the masses brain dead/
another shout to LM/
watchu said was true/about ma previous review/
and I do not condemn/
ya wordz rose like the sun in the AM/
gave life like a blue stem/
but motherfuck the rest of them/
I see right through ya like a transparent gem/
Bump to this hip jam/
Look, they feelin uneasy/ is he/
Talking to me, I’m gonna make it easy/
Motherfuck a weezy/ ya sleazy/
Bitch ass punk/
Lookin like a dick that’s shrunk/
Ya rhymz stink, they could be mistaken for a skunk/
And ya flows defunct/ ya getting sunk/
Ya tongues rotten, cuz all you spit is junk/
I spit venom that leaves you blind drunk/

This middlefinger goes out to penskills/
For addin ya 2cents and thinking dat ya real/
Ya rhymz are so literally ill/
They make a pig squeal/ ya gets cooked like bastill/
Ya shit makes me wanna pop the pill/
You cant stop ma reign like the tropicals of brazil/
I’m gonna cut it short cuz ya bouts t’a get killed/
Who ya tryin to con that ya bitch ass is penskilled/
Battle against me andget ya brain cells peeled/
Found ya back o’ the frontline, poppin contraceptive pills/
Tell me this in one line, is yo ass getting the thrills/
I’m gonna end this with an amen/
But watch that never again/
Mention ma name through ya pen/
Hope I don’t have to mention this every now & then/
Cuz if & when/ ya gonna end/ up a slain man/


c'mon gimme sum feedback peeps..

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This was alright....structure could be touched up in a few spots but still alright....drop the / at the end of your lines and you have them in your lines as well, try not to do that though....had some alright vocab in there....flow was alright in this....but keep at it.

..Hmm..better than your first piece...you must Idolize me..I don't even know you and your are so interested in me..understandable..I'm ILL...

.~Click on my sig..and leave your feedback~..I'm curious to find out...

thanx for the feedback...i'm workin on perfecting ma whole game..
and penskillz..middlefinger means..
FUCK YOU...not that i idolise..
thats the difference..
read towards the end.. and u'll see how much
i idolise you..BITCH..ha haha

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YoUrS TrUlLY... .CL