my haiku!

i am an ill rhymer
i shred emcees from head to toe
nobody can stop this flow

part 2

i am the ice man
my flows are hot and very ill
i win all my battles

ok this is a gud attepmt but haiku counts lead 5-7-5
your first poem lead counts 6-8-6
your secnd one lead counts 5-8-6
the first one looks like you just made a count mistake but the secnd one just luks like u wer mixed up..... gud try tho............return tha fava!

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Ahh Shawty is correct. Your count is wrong for a Haiku. But further than that, if the count was right this would actually be a Senryu (A Haiku written about subjects other than nature).
Here, I will show you the count -

i-am-an-ill-rhy-mer (7 counts, should be 5)
i-shred-em-cees-from-head-to-toe (8 counts, should be 7)
no-body-can-stop-this-flow (6 counts, should be 5)

If you want to elaborate more, there is also the Tanka. It uses a count of 5-7-5-7-7. The first 3 lines are the Hokku, or Haiku. The last 2 make it a Tanka. More than one Tanka together create a Renga, which is a number of Tanka placed within the same piece, composed usually by more than one author. A Tanka does not have to have the same theme throughout.

All this interest I see here lately in ancient Japanese poetic forms is great, keep experimenting, it is a truly beautiful form of the written word, where so much can be said in so little words

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Heh. I caught your comment on the other haiku too. Which makes me wonder why you messed the syllable count of your two haikus up.

Nonetheless, a solid attempt. But it's usually meant to brood with more than what it is. What i mean is, layered past the three lines. Depth. Er...be more than just blunt.

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