Seeing the mind behind her eyes.............vs 1 Topic, vs 2 credz, vs 3 penskills


As I once expressed, words couldnt explain how I felt, Your just blessed
I guess the meaning of life, is to pass your test, i wanted you, not sex
yep no words can explain this girl.........
your the world to me, how am i suposed to explain the world in words
The world of words the size of worlds explained in the song of birds
longing of the words, i waited for you to say, but you didnt hesitate
you stated you liked me, and thats the day my life turned great
Who am i to be now, im a man now that you have taken my hand
taken my heart, taken my mind taken my eyes you made me a man
If this aint true love........... i dont know if ill ever beleive
your the one for me, smart, funny, ill never leave
i remember telling my friends, your the girl i need to keep
take the leap sweetheart, your unique and thats what got to me
not knowing you, well not knowing your inside, not knowing your life
knowing what i saw, then loving what i saw on the insight, your so bright


When I first met you…all I did was just catch a glimpse…
Of your love hidden within your eye’s black eclipse…
My heart grew attached real quick from your deep passion…
Not the good looks or what comes from your keen fashion..
Its what comes from your heart...that i just truly adore..
Its not the sex because baby you can do me much more…
Like giving me your love or just by holding my hand…
As we just smile at each other while molding our plans…
Of the future, because theres no way I can let you go…
Because all of your love you have just yet to show…
There’s just so much to you that you just got inside…
Makes me love you more no wonder you caught my eye…


She is the signature of purity..
Her innocent mentality disrups all my worries..
She studied accupuncture and takes pain away in a hurry..
Stare out my window as she waters the garden quietly and peacefully..
She taught me about natures tranquility..
Besides giving Love to me,she made me into the man I turrned out to be..
I can go on for days but I'ma keep it short and lovely,simply put,I'm just lucky...

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Real Nice Collab Here. . Topic, You Came Ok. . Even Though Yours Is The Longest It Seems You Came A Bit Weaker Than Thest. . Credz. . This Love This Is Ya Steez Home Boy. . What Are You Gonna Become. . The Next Ja Rule ? Lol. . Serious, Nice Verse, No Complaints, Keep Doin Shit Like You Do This Here. . Penskills. . I Continue To Be Impressed With Your Writings Dog, Your Verse Was Short. . N I Was Feelin It More Than Credz N Topic's. . You Had The Best Line In The Piece Too. . Although A Bit Played. .

She is the signature of purity..
Her innocent mentality disrups all my worries..
She studied accupuncture and takes pain away in a hurry..
^ ^ Last Line Was Dope. . Ya Whole Verse Is Quotable. .

Consistent Flow Throughout, Everything Was Nice. . Ya'll Did Good Together. . Pz.

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thanx man

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Topic- I think ya had a nice verse....i think ya had good structure.......and flow was really nice Man I enjoyed it very Much......I think ya started it off really nice with ya Vocab..ya had a few Multis I spotted So Try and Add more..ya Wordplay was Good Man....i think your verse was good to start it...good piece

C. man (Credz)- ya had good strucutre like always..i enjoyed this verse but i still think ya Flow could be a bit betta man but it was still good.....i enjoyed ya vocab and ya wordplay...u did well to follow Topic And came with a good verse man..i enjoy your multis very good ..It was Good i enjoyed it alot man...keep it droping Kuz...

Penskills- you had a very short ver but i enjoyed it....very simple flow but it still was Good....Ya Made it good to end it off with Like a Short verse so ya DOnt drag out the ending so yea that was good....i think ya could of add more multis in this..ya vocab was Pretty Good And Ya Used ya Rhymes Well.....but it was dope for 7 lines man keep it droping...

thanx man

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i thought this was pretty avarage ,,,credz ive seen al;ot better from you... although yours was the better verse... none of them were up to scratch.... they lacked meaning and the complexity was lost in places... though they were different styles... i dunno.... thought it could have been executed better... as is.. not bad...

well thank you then

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great collab.....all the verses were good....topics lacked the most but everyone had great metas and good wordplay....vocab was consistent as well as the topic i liked it...and plus everypone had different ways of expressing it and thet made it very interestin......good shit i'd like to see more of this tandum
8/10
peace
peep
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"NO SEX"ha!yeah,that'll work,cap'n save a ho!i guess all you internet rappers want true love!i got a great idea-go fall in love with eachother!you obviously want to be someone you could never be-a black guy,so why dont you embrace the fact that you could find true love-with another pussy-whipped honkey!peace-of human excrement-money money

TOPIC:nice long verse...u really put ure heart on this one..good flow and all
very nice, was impressed with ure dicsription

CREDZ:same thing ...very nice..had sum good synonyms and all
very impressive

PENSKILLZ:BULLSHIT!!!!!!!!u not even a man..hahahaha
jus kiddin..nice and short..not bad..i was impressed...

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