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Parting is such sweet sorrow
one to say the two will not be tommorow No matter how long the courtship has existed The schism will illicit heavy sobbing and cries The tears well and eyes shut to resist the swell But the gates must give, as if signaled by bell the bells rings, the floodgates open, the saline flows but salty emissions are not the worst of the thoroughs the mental anguish of separation is devastating the reason for life itself appears to be dissapating nothing matters in your struggle against death in retrograde Just emerging unscathed from the perpetually twisiting maze succesful navigation of the mutating enigmatic labyrinth known as life to its many inhabitants the events appear as encrypted ciphers cleartext below, but cannot be deciphered so you hopelessly attempt to rationalize your being but no crypto genius could surmise a meaning because there isn't one to understand A pointless amalgam of organs and glands Meaning stirpped away... the pain still stings Why o why did we share two rings My questions turn from tears to thoguhts of self exectution suicide isn't perfect, but a transient solution with all the intensity of a demon entranced i bury my eyes in the mirror and study the black pearls two shallow pools of brown...fixated on the blade n my hands My life, it must unfurl before i choose to end it all with a quick flourIish (life stares at you, never to remove its glance you believe it's cricumstance, life's not out to get you when it's really a dance, choreographed, the steps laid out before you I implore you, as soem evangelist on television never waste time, take advantage of fortuitous visions squander not your time on this planet give a big FUCK YOU to life and let it have it fuck shit up, civil disobedience, cause damage anarchy fucka government , im osama you bastards bawl not when soldiers fall the effort is undaunted vive la resistence...flow til you die, bavehearts flaunted Just needed to get that outta my system I love America, it's beautiful flaws and wisdom Sometimes you get angry, it's just one of those days wish id written something better..oh well) everythign in parenthesis, im not sure if it should be a part of the base....changes the mood
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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vocab was good flow was ok but work on the topic and dont be so vague with it, make it more understandable
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Im assuming you used an online dictionary.
If not then im impressed by your vocabulary. Sounds like a poem to me but the FUCK YOU part killed it, Good stuff.. keep it commin!
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..NIce...very nice...great Vocab..good flow..but..one question???..where you going????
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never used a rhyming dictionary..i have a ridiculously huge vocabulary...i was personally dissapointed with this....it wasn't as complex as id like...
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
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this was good i enjoyed the concept and the all round base of the song. both verses really creative good vocab i ejoyed the consistancy very well done.
I'd quote lines but i'm lazy. Keep it up man. |
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