I'm ready for war, an u kno ma punches will split ya jaw/
See this shits like a sale cuz u got more than you bargained for/
Mixin atomic bombs wiv uzi's makes me cuz i'm about to x-plode-fast/
An fukin wiv me's ya worste task cuz i'll leave you like micheal J fox without the Delorean-----Back in the past/
N fukka aftermath ima subtract ya life before mass after teachin u a lesson like u was sat-in-class/
An ima have-to-laugh cuz you bitches was warned not to stand-in-ma-path/
Now u gettin blast betta make like a bath n relax like radox/
cuz when i swing u get sent for a home-run like the sox////

few decent punches...it was okay..some were played out though..start replying to other peoples work..peace..

how can sum punches b played out wen those punches have never been thought of?
and as for u talking to me like im a newbie louw it till u know who i am.....

thnks for the reply still...

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killa...

^ I can care less who you are...plus..M.fox lines way played out..(sure,you never herad of the line..blah..blah..blah)..

^^^^
not as a end of the punch i made so louw it.....

n e way, nuff cloggin the thread wit bitchin....

killa...

Sounded something like a bad Joe Budden remake...Mike Fox/DeLorean....Used already...Wasn't that great...use more original punches. One

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This was a pretty blah self prop verse that lacked any real punches...

Some funny stuff, (MJ Fox, bargained for)...

But aside from that, eh...

Decent flow, stupid bold lettering, though...

Best part about this was that ya kept it short and sweet.

That and the humor.

Always like a chuckle.

Peace

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thnx, uppin 4 reps

played subject...

try workin on somethin a with a lil deeper thought...
some of the punches were lackin but it is all good...

kinda got a chuckle out of it...but not from your lines...

peace...

safe...
uppin...

^ Didn't exactally go, [split ya jaw] [bargained for] ehh.. 2nd line is played also.



^ Another bar, that doesn't rhyme. [x-plode] [micheal j fox]. Both lines could have been redone better.



^ Ehh, not feeling these at all. Why are you bolding ever word that rhymes? Anyways.. "N fukka'', wtf is that suppose to mean? "Swing u get sent for a home-run like the sox"

Well man, you got alot of work to do, elevate, your rhymes are mad simple, you streatch your lines, to where they don't need to be. If you worked on a proper structure. Your wordplay is very very simple, metaphors can be worked on alo. Your flow is off, because you have to many words in there that don't need to be. Grammer is horrible. Keep dropping tho, you can only get better.

Stay up.

i think u all need to hear it audio how its sposed to b worded cuz yall r readin it wrong lol.....

n e way, it was a quick key so its all good...

not bad for a kwik ket style........good stuff!

safe, 1st person to understand its just a quick key.......