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01-29-04, 02:02 PM
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Keystyle - Antonio Banderas / 10 Solid Lines
IP: 1E3A 659B
Keystyle - Antonio Banderas
Track - 10 Solid lines Who can see me?????????????????? The answer-is-none+ I smoke deez niggas, like Snoop doggs cancerous-lungs+ Watch me make textees disappear, I am da phatomous-one+ People always shoot off their mouth like a staganant-gun+ Until the Ransom-has-come, I'll proceed to torture-opponents+ I'll shrank your right eye just to proportion-your-focus+ I'm killin these kids, but I believe Abortions-are-hopeless+ I stay spittin filth & words smell stentch like revoked-piss+ I spoke-glitched cuz my slang word reflected my street-voice+ With discrete-poise, I snap necks like cheap-plastic-toys+
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01-29-04, 02:19 PM
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IP: 01F8 C64F
Aight i suppose. Not sure bout the rhyme pattern but the vocab is good
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01-29-04, 02:24 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
this was decent...few good punches..what's up with+++
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01-29-04, 03:14 PM
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IP: 1E3A 659B
Quote:
I use plusses in all my battles..... I needed to use an original format.... I try not to battle or drop the same way other people drop their rhymes.....
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01-29-04, 04:14 PM
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IP: FF89 3C60
Nice little verse...
For a self-prop. Pretty boring subject... Yeah, you're bad ass, we get it. But ya laid down some nice multi's... A couple of good metas... And kept it short and sweet. (which I really appreciated!) Very decent self prop gangsta rhyme. But nothing more. Peace
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01-29-04, 05:14 PM
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IP: 4287 3F49
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yeah what he said |
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01-30-04, 07:28 AM
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IP: 1E3A 659B
TY for all your feedback..... Glad Im getting good feedback from top vets here...
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01-30-04, 07:45 AM
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IP: 6F9E F23B
aiiight I suppose...wud sound gud live or somethin...not a bad attempt but start to write concerning a topic and U'll elavate gud
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01-30-04, 07:55 AM
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IP: C400 C802
yea...like B2K said...
self props are gettin played but this was ight i suppose... not all that exciting to read or anything tho... try working on a deeper subject... |
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01-30-04, 10:28 AM
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IP: 1E3A 659B
TY - Anymore last minute feedback before I drop my next text writting....
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01-30-04, 10:56 AM
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thought ya had a couple of decent bits of wordplay... and some nice multis.... the punches were ok, but could be harder.... im not really one for self props.... but on the whole this was average....
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01-30-04, 12:10 PM
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IP: EB27 E87F
This was an okay piece, nice read. It seemed like some of your rhymes were a little forced. But you had good vocab, metas, and some multis which were nice. Keep it up, it seems like the potentials there.
Hit my battle up against KLO if you can, I took the time to reply to your stuff, so it'd be nice if you returned the favor. |
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