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Old 01-30-04, 07:14 PM   #1
Jamil
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This just a little rap i made when i was bored,nuthin 2serious,n not very long,but tell me wot u think neway,i aint like a wannabe Nas or that tryna rite bout serious issues!!!i also got stuff bout the usual like sex n violence,dependin on wot u like



what is life like for me?shit gettin stormy
tradin war stories,fuckin bitches when they hormy
what type of life is that?walkin round with no purpose,
harming and doin things that hurt us,
all the drugs and drama aint all bad but y'know,
drugs can turn a little girls into crack ho's,
God is with us thru it all,the hi's and lo's,
gotta stay strong all young sisters and bro's,
it aint worth gettin locked up for a stupid mistake,
people who talk behind ya back,fuck em they fake,
all they do is spread hate and cause shit,
it mite b hard but u gotta admit,
only person u can truly trust is you,
thats if ya wanna make it thru,
in this hard life nuthin comes free,
so i say it again What is life like 4me


thanx 4readin,......Jamil
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Old 01-31-04, 04:23 AM   #2
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This was an okay piece, I think that you should work on getting your structure a little better, makes for an easier read, And maybe get some more vocab in there. Other than that just keep writing that's the best thing you can do, don't get discouraged.
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