12 lines
no hate vote ect..

Timeless the rhymeless coward...
couldn't last ten seconds in his finest hour!
As fluid as milk gone sour, we should talk improvement...
because all the shit you drop is truely a bowel-movement.
I'll prove it.. don't even need twelve... It's embarassin'....
I know you mean well, but you fail in comparison!
You should be cherishin', every line that even acknowledges you...
Since its your first time i'll let it slide... no need for apologies dude
While I give you a few here's some food for thought.. hope you don't choke
Your punches hit about as hard as arms caught in the ropes!
Until next time we meet bitch...
Assuming that you don't want to retire after you read this!

your new to rap battles, so am i, but theres a difference in us
i've once been on here before,so when I bust i'm battlin under an alias
your just a stupid newby a baby, coz ya still have goo on ya rattle
u have no posts yet on here,so with your first you'll lose this battle
and tha'll be bad new for you apathy, coz i'm constantly rippin scripts
ya flow is virus, that hits my computers bits to make it trip and flip
A 50 year old ho is tighter than you, ya need to make an impact
packed water flows better than you do,sorry to attract the real facts
you'll get no vote this is no joke, you'll never be this weeks flavour
u contrast trying to be black, when ya still got a vanilla ice screen saver
i'm a country dictator a style anialator, i send haters to the traitor
theres no point in finishin this flow his is so bad, so ill finish it...............

(Sorry it took so long, i erased it by accident the first time i wrote it out so i had to do it again)

Come eveybody, I need some feedback. lets get some votes in I would appreciate it

1*uppin........................................... ..........

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Its Been Four Hours And Not 1 Vote............uppin :-)

both verses were very good, i was even surpisred.

timeless came hard as helll that boy was droppin lines that coke fiends couldnt handle

timeless wins, his punches were hard, smarter, funnier. his word play were better

both had good structure

vote - timeless

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Timeless:
Punch Lines:7.5/10
Structure:9/10
Vocab:7/10
Flow:8.5/10

Apathy:
Punches:7/10
Structure:5/10
Vocab:6.5/10
Flow:7/10

Timeless barely got my vote..it was a pretty good battle but Timeless had better wordplay and punches..Apathy your good too, but your structure was off and that kind of messed up your flow...but ne wayz Vote:Timeless

Vote on this
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111747
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111608

Uppin.... lets get some more votes. I would like some honest criticism or feedback on what you think/ where I need improvement, Thanks

4* uppin..........................................wil l return the favour on open mics and battles.

[I]Nice battle....

Apathy - Ok flow, some punches hit hard but your structure let you down....all your lines were of a different length. And you needed to be slightly more creative 6/10

Timeless - Flow was nice, punches hit slightly harder and your structure was good but like Apathy.....try and be more creative 8/10

v/ Timeless.....not by much tho

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1940 - 2002

In Respect

yo this was a good battle...both had good verses and flows....

vote-timeless

reason-came hard as hell...had harder hittin punches...some personals....and i would say that this line was the best of the battle

A 50 year old ho is tighter than you, ya need to make an impact
packed water flows better than you do,sorry to attract the real facts


hit these up wit honest votes and i will do the same with your battles
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111543
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111538