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Old 02-05-04, 02:07 PM   #1
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Exclamation life

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undefined niggaz think life hard but yall niggaz don't know life ain't but a show thats y i flow on this shit i keep it real and nigga ain't doin shit but makin a deal and orderin a meal so seal the deal wit lil kiddie meal, bitch don't say nuthin jus stop buggin and i won't say shit but lick ur mamas clit remember my name and don't say the lord's name in vain cuz shit man my nigga lunatic will yall asses away and cuz nigga im here 2 stay.
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Old 02-05-04, 02:14 PM   #2
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alright

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o.k nano it striaght but don't be kissing my ass just playing dog keep it up and u could do better
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Old 02-05-04, 02:18 PM   #3
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thanx man jus getting warmed up aight
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Old 02-05-04, 02:32 PM   #4
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ok

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this was aiight
nothin special
i think the wirtten structure is what took away form it
real hard to follow that shit when it's in paragraph form
feel me?
anyways man keep postin
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Old 02-05-04, 02:47 PM   #5
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You need to elevate.....dont put it in paragraph form, line on top of line works much better and it helps with the flow.....work on better content as well....your concept was ok but i think it could have been done better.....but elevate and keep at it man.
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Old 02-05-04, 03:11 PM   #6
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yo, too much "n" word and bad words. Thats what makes you flow sound tight.
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Old 02-05-04, 03:17 PM   #7
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This Was Horrible
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