Once Again You Prove Ya Self As A Great Open Mic Spitter. I'd Even Say You Were Up There With Penskillz. Very Deep Piece Man, Flow Was Good And Structure Was Also Very Tight. Vocab Was Nice And Ya Ended With A Good Line I Thought. Keep Up These Om's Coz Their A Pleasure To Read.

9/10

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Nice......this was a dope piece......flowed smoothly like water.....good shit.......nice imagery.....sounded very poetic to me......clean an smooth......vocab was great as well......keep doin you thing dawg.....

decent indeed, your vocab and complexity are right on par but tha stucture you used kept me from findin tha flow, if it's just me...
tha topic itself is not played and gives it an originallity factor most flows nowadays lack, props...
tha way you touched on tha idea of settin tha challenge wit tha two people was uniquely an attention getter, good creativity...
overall, this was a nice piece that could be expanded into more if it were to ever be looked upon in tha future, keep droppin mad heat just like this...

9 / 10

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I think you are becoming one of the best OM very quickly...I know most of your stuff is Keystle..which makes this more amazing...this had a very smooth flow..keep up the good work..^.^...

wasnt feeling this as much as your other pieces to be honest
just seemed to lack something
a played subject to in a way
flow didnt seeme to be as smoothe as other joints neither..
feeling what you're writing about but it just seemed to lack a spark

'Where would we be without it.. There would be no more room for creation
The best thing we ever did...
... Was make pen and paper a combination
^thats the best lines in there
more of that and it would have been better

peace

Ha!!!! Freeman is dope!..you the new OM head on the block huh? Keep dropping...Crush em with that Instant shit son!

--[Flow]---
I liek your flow, you have a certain wave of originality about it within your pieces, maybe it's just the structure but me.... you had some dope rhymes in here, deep & complex.

"Without my pen id be lost.. Its my method of venting all emotion
Its one of the few things in life...
... To which a show true devotion" - liked that alot...although a rhyme in the 2nd line there would have been dope.

--[Vocab]--
Vocab was as good as ever, you have a good knowledge and you apply it perfectly to your rhymes....& the added complexity of the vocab helps to make them more thought provoking, you know.

--[Concept]--
Liked the way you portrayed this, yea, it has been done before, but what makes each piece readable is the way each individual writes it personally, and this done just that, you intrigated a first hand account of "The Challenge" as it was fittingly put, and expressed some real imagry & graphic realism into your words.

--[Overall]--
Maybe not the best i've seen form you, but was by far above what i'd consider and average open mic...4/5...it had all the attributes, Flow,Vocab,Imagry,Personality,Concept etc....Keep this shit up, your improving rapidy.

this was a short piece but it was pretty dope, got your point across nicely, very good word usage as usual.....flow was on point and the shit was just plain good...nice drop...lookin forward to the next one....

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