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02-11-04, 10:08 PM
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Oliver Clohsoff ft. Kryogenix: Was That Your Aim?
IP: 6B57 983B
[Kryogenix]
Love is a marvolous thing, that only God can bring Like the sound when birds sing or the season Spring Human love, it's bliss, but it's difficult to accomplish Can't be found on a compass, and never can it be promised When a man and a woman get together in life Then when one is betrayed the love turn into violence It's like it never was there, the affection floats away in the air And the pain and agony replaces all the comfort and care Vengence is wanted, mistakes get made, remarks get flaunted Feelings het hurt, hearts get broken, ideas get haunted One things leads to another, then it can't be changed You get the urge to murder, but after it's done, was that your aim? [Oliver Clohsoff]
Why did I have to slice your throat and slit your wrist? Remembering all the good times we shared all the times we kissed. I just can resist the more I try to stop it seems the more missed. Now im here alone alone with out my one true love. I'm so dumb, it's my fault you're no longer with us I still remember your face and the sexy was you walked. Remember the way you laughed and the delightful way you talked. And here I am wishing to re-due life and never be born. Cause without you beside me baby my heart will always be torn. I remember the times we romanced the times you held my hand and put me in a trance. Why did I have to mess up, why, all I want my love is another chance. But my life is full of alcohol and abuse, I'm so confused cant figure out what the fuck to do. I didn't mean to hurt you baby, but it wasn't me that day I hurt you, you know my love for you would never be untrue or unpure, I don't know whats happening I've never been so unsure. But here I am peering out the window think how easy it is to kill no if, buts, or maybe's, I'm jumping out nothing can stand between us, I'm coming for you baby [Kryogenix] Love is a marvolous thing, that only God can bring Like the sound when birds sing or the season Spring Human love, it's bliss, but it's difficult to accomplish Can't be found on a compass, and never can it be promised When a man and a woman get together in life Then when one is betrayed the love turn into violence It's like it never was there, the affection floats away in the air And the pain and agony replaces all the comfort and care Vengence is wanted, mistakes get made, remarks get flaunted Feelings het hurt, hearts get broken, ideas get haunted One things leads to another, then it can't be changed You get the urge to murder, but after it's done, was that your aim? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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02-11-04, 10:08 PM
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IP: 6B57 983B
I have to handle it to Oliver, he came better than what I expected him.Lets get some feedback on this joint.
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02-11-04, 10:24 PM
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_-Lucky Rabbits Foot-_
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IP: CF61 4449
this was good some vocab
didnt use much tho not overdoing it either... good topic good verses by both some of oliver his verse didnt flow very well though, kryo i liked the way your verse ended... you both had good vocab Imagery was ok in this nothing to be amzed of... peep my other Open Mic called... _.::-No Luck I-::._ It's another to parter...
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02-11-04, 10:25 PM
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IP: CF61 4449
two part story...
sorry uppin this for you I guess
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02-11-04, 11:12 PM
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IP: 6B57 983B
uppin for some more feedback on this peice..
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02-12-04, 12:25 AM
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This is my first post!
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IP: 409D 1C7C
i think its very good, the lyrics are very deep and emotional, good usage of werds and flows tagther real well, keep ritin your furture looks good
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02-12-04, 12:30 AM
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PuRe AzN..
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IP: 5BEE 1725
yes this is a very good piece.. got ya point across definally good vocab.. i like it alot... concept wasnt played at all originality gooood lol.. overall out of ten id definally give it a 8/10 good piece
some ill shit hit my anthem up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113773
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02-13-04, 03:01 PM
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IP: 5176 F051
lookin for some more feedback on this collab..
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02-13-04, 06:00 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
yo kryo lol wtf man.......i just saw this post right now for the first time........might as well up this
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02-13-04, 06:02 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
o yea sorry to freepost but this was mah first topical ever so tell me what u all think about it....and fast i dont got all day
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02-14-04, 09:14 AM
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IP: C1DA C961
aiight uppin dsi for more feedback....................
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02-14-04, 09:28 AM
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IP: 5C4B 9DFC
Both came very dope.... i was impressed by Kryo with his good flowing words and visualization... vocab was top stuff too....
But Oliver blew me away... his flow fell off towars the end, but I loved his lyrics.... beautiful poetry that was.... great storytelling, and i loved the ending.... your vocab was very good too... I like how the contrast came... Kryo was the nice, regretful guy, but oliver was the psychotic, "ill kill you then kill myself" guy.... altogether a very nice topic, well executed.. you two make a great team... the only thing i think it lacked was multies... neither of you had many, except for a few oliver did.... still good stuff though. Rating = 9/10 please vote on my collab with FormulaMC entitled "The Origins Of The Two"... thanks heaps |
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02-14-04, 09:37 AM
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IP: C1DA C961
lol aiight...im really not that tyep of person, im more of the kill you then run away type ...lol....up up and away
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02-14-04, 10:06 AM
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IP: 0FB3 1E4D
w00t..told this was gonna be dope Oliver..we can do another anytime you want..
 ..but next time..with more Kryogenix members..
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02-14-04, 01:20 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: C1DA C961
aight more feed back...up
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