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Old 02-15-04, 11:59 AM   #1
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I’ve got red-hot chilly peppers, putting FIYUH between buns
Your tongue is roasted, before you even take a bite of one
Lyrically frozen, it’s freezing underneath zilch degrees
I’d liquefy you out way sooner than you started to freeze
Every single one of my thump defenses are unbreakable hittin
Get a hold of the heatstroke, at a standstill you’re still sweatin
Refrain from being a pussy! I didn’t even lay a hand on you
Stuff Mexican hot sauce up you, your beak embarks on bleedin
Irritating you because you’re tryin to fry me under the sun
Seeing that derelict ships in the atmosphere on the wing by
Sorry you bitches but no easy target possibly will swallow me
I’m the worm that just loves to consume sodium chloride
Piercing knives in me is only situating lungs in a bind
For my mind and internals are full of carbon monoxide
I’m so fresh wit it, no other emcee’s fire’s able to melt my ice
I stay slashin documents! With my other dissimilar styles
Expressive miles in a file line vocation faster than Tums
These vocabularies speak loud! That they pop-eye eardrums
At what time it’s time for the least of war, I’m so fuckin sick wit it
Emcees get sent to a hospital, they rushed me to the nearest clinic

UPPIN!
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Old 02-15-04, 04:48 PM   #2
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This was alright here i thought.....structure was good in this.....the flow to this seemed to be good, it flowed pretty well i thought....you had some good vocab in there....try ading some more multies though to make it better....keep at it.
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Old 02-16-04, 09:49 AM   #3
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thanks for the feedback dawg . . UPPIN this bitch!
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Old 02-16-04, 10:16 AM   #4
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This was alright here i thought.....structure was good in this.....the flow to this seemed to be good, it flowed pretty well i thought....you had some good vocab in there....try ading some more multies though to make it better....keep at it.


basically took the words outta my mouth....
liked your metas ... and wittiness....
ok vocab....not bad...
multies would help a little...
good flow...
good drop, keep at it ...
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Old 02-16-04, 10:40 AM   #5
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/\ good lookin out dawg . . yeah i need work on the multies . . can't argue wit that . . but i'm just a newbie to this shit . . lol . . so really . . don't really have the mind for it right now . . but i appreciate the feedback dawg . . no doubt . . UPPIN this bitch!
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