GIT OFF MA BACK

git off ma back niggaz
cut me some slack niggaz
otha shit wuz poetry
this shit is rap nigga

u like my gat? nigga
u got ma back? nigga

naw u aint got it, u jus on it, that's a fact nigga

so wut's hood dawg i ain't fa talkin
i'm in tha club strait up body rockin

i'll kill niggaz that don't leave me alone
got u repeatin yaself like a screwed up song

i spit fa ages neva haveta stop
i mean they git dirt off ma shoulder like i spit fa tha ROC
(R-O-C)
yeah that's me i alwayz git called on
i alwayz ball..but i neva git balled on

i sit around and watch ya dome fall
c ya motha cryin when she git that phone call

i split ya wig kill you wit ma bass
hit ya in ya head now there's blood on ya face

i hate you can't understand wut i'm trynna say
git off ma back, before ma glock comes out to play


HOLLA BACK

that was tight
work on vocab though and try to fit some multis in there

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There ya go. Really good flow, but vocab was too simple. I liked it, Some of it only rhymed if you rap it outloud, but it is really good. You are elvatin with these open mics. If you keep your flow good like this in your battles you will win that category. Besides that there was really nothing. But it was much better then the others you dropped.

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do your research.

yeah fa sho gurr that was sic n like will a peer said you could work on ur vocab a lil bit but other than that it was coo..keep it up...........

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i thought it was hot but i bet it would sound better as an audio...........


one love.........

damn..well when i thought it up i wuz spittin it out loud to c if it flowed good..yeah so i need tha vocab so ima work on that fa sho...this is one that i finally liked
and yeah i think it wud sound betta on a audio....i need a mic..lol
thanx guyz and gurlz(will) lmao..one love

good work ma. that shit was straight. im gonna have to agree with a few of the other suggestions mentioned above. as willa said, you need to play around with your vocab a little bit more and work on some multies...but besides that, your coming along alot smoother. your improving star. keep it up. one.

s.v...............c.s.

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Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



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R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

ya'll go vote
me vs j mob
me vs chalk clorox
me vs snyper
me vs lyrical havok
i vote 4 ya'll so return tha favor ya heard
and say a lil bout this hurr too

yeah feed back wanted for sure.............
yesh yesh yeaa

yeah that thing was tight. would sound good as an audio.
keep doin your thing.

fa sho thanx fa tha comment dawg
tis been not voted on ya heard
good job

nice flow dogg

keep it up

like that shit, could use better vocab though

ya'll me and jmob had a hella good battle..
i won 5-4 but mann we wuz evenly matched
GREAT JOB J-MOB