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Old 03-30-04, 01:01 AM   #1
~ Sinnister ~
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Suffering!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Suffer inside myself
there is no hope
In this grave
bottomless
the deepest depths
an empty pit
no way to live
dead
It's killing me
this deadly plaque
poisoned blood
runs through my veins
finding pleasure
within the pain
I'm suffering
A step away
from the edge
one more rush
All I need is
A harder push
there is no cure
my infection is self inflicted
I'm suffering
in ecstasy
slowly dying
inside my body
locked away
with no escape
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Old 03-30-04, 01:19 AM   #2
Verbatim
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Pretty Simple Poem

Felt the emotion,
Had very nice imagery,
Flow was decent
Vocab was there, but definatly coulda been better
Nice drop tho Sinnister
look forward to seein more from you

Check out my latest poem called "Pure Emotion"

peace
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