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you give me 30 minutes to spit,i leave you with 30 years to regret/
come to nyc an leave ya spine disconnected, like cheap internet/
you couldnt cover from my rain of winz if you used an umbrella/
shots will leave ya heart with no beat like ya body was rappin acapella/
I’ll remove his lungs throw it and make this kid catch his breath/
the only way you ever get promotion is if you fake your death/
when ya brains come out ya mouth you probally think before u talk/
the only pussy you can get is called incest so think before u talk/
keep batlin me an ill leave yo record the opposite of restricted/
and i will leave yo insides out like they just been evicted/
You wack and im ill,could only come close to me cause opposites attract/
make yo name compact to 1 N,cause punchlines kill on contact/
exposin you easily an undetected like i waz stealth/
you got 5 different screen names just to logon and give props to yourself/

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You should have left those dusty ryhmes on da shelf
Cuz you say you a hustla, well you jus hustled ya self
Ya ryhmes are characterized as a hut, mines are a house
I hit a line drive, u hit a put, ya punches softer than mickey mouse
U gon feel my wrath, my pimp cane is more potent than moses stath
Look at these ryhmes, do da math, you couldn't produce half
I'm a burn dis nigga,Don't worry cuz this bitch gonna scurry
An disappear in a hurry, when I deep fry his ass like curry
My ryhmes are precise, an burn ya ass worse than beans an rice
U think u nice, but you so wack u used "think before u talk" twice
I mean what else can I say, but you'll never get a rap deal
Cuz ya whole verse was so gay that it was wearin' high heals
Cam blastin u shoulda ducked, downsized u ryhmes gave'em a "tummy tuck"
U suck, I'm done, somebody put something in his mouth, my zipper's stuck

The End....Hold That!!!!!!!

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alright, both of your verses had some really nice lines and a lot of whack filler crap.

"you give me 30 minutes to spit,i leave you with 30 years to regret/
come to nyc an leave ya spine disconnected, like cheap internet/ "

nice. good opener to intro the battle, pretty nice punch and then a decent line.

"when ya brains come out ya mouth you probally think before u talk/
the only pussy you can get is called incest so think before u talk/"

rhyme a phrase with itself is generally to be avoided. also, punch half makes sense and is weak. second line.. whatever. whack.

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You wack and im ill,could only come close to me cause opposites attract/
make yo name compact to 1 N,cause punchlines kill on contact/"

First line very nice, but the second line was a bad personal, the second part doesnt really go with the first. really, the punch in the first line could have been its own bar, made the "whack and im ill " part into its own line and use it as a setup.

"exposin you easily an undetected like i waz stealth/
you got 5 different screen names just to logon and give props to yourself/"

the flow isn't the best, definetely not a great closer... could be worse though. over all, like i said, gotta have less filler. also try for more multis, wordplay and up your vocab a bit.

"You should have left those dusty ryhmes on da shelf
Cuz you say you a hustla, well you jus hustled ya self"

I like it, nice intro, good flow. After this though, your verse goes down hill... that "you do the math" thing is a little too tight to the em line for my taste, the comparison thing you had going early was pretty ok, but it doesnt replace a nice hard punch. the "house" line felt like you were just looking for a "mouse" rhyme cuz it was weak and sort of took the punch out the "mouse" line. also.. your closing was weak... the "think before you talk" flip you did on him was ok but you could have done more with that i tihnk.

v/ looch, tight though.

drop honest votes only on my battles, give good feedback, etc. peace.

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yo this was a slack battle to me...no disrepect

E.Looch...thought u had 1 good line...."shots will leave ya heart with no beat like ya body was rappin acapella/"
and I thought u was bout to slaughter him with this one but ya punch just became a lame slao on tha wrist..."when ya brains come out ya mouth you probally think before u talk/
the only pussy you can get is called incest so think before u talk"
ya personals weren't really personal....overall u get a 4/10


Shadows edge....whoo!u had some nice punches and play on words...Cam blastin u shoulda ducked, downsized u ryhmes gave'em a "tummy tuck"
U suck, I'm done, somebody put something in his mouth, my zipper's stuck"....had me dyin laughin....but besides that...I was like"thats all"?

no disrespect but Looch came a little harder


check my battles out and vote wit honesty...
Black Thief vs. Fatal Lyrickzz
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119636


Black Thief vs. Enygma
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119541

^he must always be high when he votes preciate the votes


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E-looch
Flow – that’s was such an easy reader I felt every punch
Punches – if he’s still standing then he’s either big, or suffers from slow reactions
Personals – let’s see, should I quote the whole thing
Opening - so tight
Closing - brilliant
Meti’s – brilliant
All and all – ya verse was damn tight, you ripped up everything he had
8/10

Best line
“you couldnt cover from my rain of winz if you used an umbrella/
shots will leave ya heart with no beat like ya body was rappin acapella”

Triple-N - Great counter attack
Flow – very nice didn’t fall off
Punches – bit weaker then his(little bit untrained)
Personals – also had a good few, very nice
Meti’s – a fair fight for the best
All and all – ya closing is what got me, man im still laughing
Almost had it, too much boasting was ya downfall, he punched all the way
And you didn’t, 6/10

Best line: (bit gay)
“Cam blastin u shoulda ducked, downsized u ryhmes gave'em a "tummy tuck"”
U suck, I'm done, somebody put something in his mouth, my zipper's stuck

Vote: E-Looch

gotta up this shti again

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Hey thief... It was Triple N and E looch... not shadows edge... HAH

But anyways, i dont have time.

Both ya'll had some nice verses, and though the punches were all played, but what punches aren't right?. So, the flow and punches went to E Looch.

V/ E Looch

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