i wanna lay back in a loft from sellin packets of soft hit the corner ball until i got placks on my wall, wit no distractions at all, back to the wall, gotta cook and grind sacks of the raw, passin em' off ,when the jake come blastin em' off, no hommys assumed probable cause, your favorite young buck probably lost, push diesel in my hood but we call it exhaust, now we lay back stretched in a porsche, with a bad hispanic's face in my drawers, doin her chores, eagle tucked in the face plate mahogany doors, feds searching for the nigga while he tryin to score, oz's dawg move em' in 4's, nice with the 4 ends with a 5, haze smoke staining my eyes, carry the thing when i ride, that moves strangers aside, most cats hatin can't see the danger that lies

It was really hard to understand, because you've got no structure. I had the same problem when I started out, but take alook at some other open mics and you'll understand how it works. Reading the tutorials are also a good idea.

Change the structure and then pm me and i'll review it again.

yeah dat karle merks is right i didnt understand shit of that but if you make it understandable i might collaberat i got some shit typed up.

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